Education is a crucial concern for all parents. It is very important factor to get a suitable career in future. Therefore, if father and mother have more influential affect on their children education or not. this can be evaluated in different aspects. admittedly, all parents should involved in their kids learning. But, in my perspective, Today, youngsters relay more on themselves than on their parents. In the following paragraph, I will explore a several reason to explain my point of view.
To begin with, with the development of technology in all part of our life, young people become more independent than in previous decades. With the presence of internet, kids can learn a tremendous information without rely on their dad or mom, and even on their teachers. This is example from my real life. In the past, every day, my dad explain to me math problems, and science experiments. Today, my son easily browses in his computer to understand many lessons. He just put a key words in Google or You tube to get many explanation to his concern. As we can see from this example, how our kids become independent and they no more rely on us in there academic performance.
In addition, the other reason springs to my mind. why parent become less involved in their kids education, people now a days more busy with many hard live tasks. So when they come back home after long days work, there are many house task should they do, like take care of their family by shopping, and so on. Furthermore, they need time to relax and take brake. Moreover, parents spend spare time with their kids by enjoy watching movies or go to park, in order to increase bonding between them. In this case, kids become relax and have positive mood to return back to their academic subjects and become responsible more and more.
In conclusion. I strongly do not concur with this statement. This is based on exposition which are mentioned above, Children to day more independent and responsible to depend on themselves. as a result, the parents become less involved in their kids education than in past.
Education is a crucial concern for all parents. It is very important factor to get a suitable career in future. Therefore, if father and mother have more influential affect on their children education or not. this can be evaluated in different aspects. admittedly, all parents should involved in their kids learning. But, in my perspective, Today, youngsters relay more on themselves than on their parents. In the following paragraph, I will explore a several reason to explain my point of view.
To begin with, with the development of technology in all part of our life, young people become more independent than in previous decades. With the presence of internet, kids can learn a tremendous information without rely on their dad or mom, and even on their teachers. This is example from my real life. In the past, every day, my dad explain to me math problems, and science experiments. Today, my son easily browses in his computer to understand many lessons. He just put a key words in Google or You tube to get many explanation to his concern. As we can see from this example, how our kids become independent and they no more rely on us in there academic performance.
In addition, the other reason springs to my mind. why parent become less involved in their kids education, people now a days more busy with many hard live tasks. So when they come back home after long days work, there are many house task should they do, like take care of their family by shopping, and so on. Furthermore, they need time to relax and take bark. Moreover, parents spend spare time with their kids by enjoy watching movies or go to park, in order to increase bonding between them. In this case, kids become relax and have positive mood to return back to their academic subjects and become responsible more and more.
In conclusion. I strongly do not concur with this statement. This is based on exposition which are mentioned above, Children to day more independent and responsible to depend on themselves. as a result, the parents become less involved in their kids education than in past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77777777778 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62966810092 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566666666667 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3574141087 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.7826086957 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.652173913 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39130434783 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305914707886 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893286763271 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105198988187 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211916988673 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.176891005218 0.0645574589148 274% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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