The education is essentiat thing in children life, therefor kids should obtain a good education, with the enormous development of technology like invention of smart phone and presence of internet and a lot of social media, some believe that, these devices will make the education more difficult than before in the past, in my perspective , I do not concur with the statement that, computers and electronic tools may negative effect on children learning, In the following essay, I will elaborate on a couple of reason to explain my point of view.
To begin with, computer and smart phone are paramount tools for everyone, especially student, this is due to the fact that, these devises enable kids to obtain enormous knowledge and information that cannot be obtain from teacher or parent, because in the school teachers have specific mission and limited subject, in the other hand students can get many information by using their computers or smart phone, even they spend long time on the phone or playing video game, they learn how to face any difficulty or hard mission and how to solve the situation. In conclusion, we can see the advantages of electric devices in our life.
In addition, computer and internet can be beneficial for children, they can help them to do their assignments and project, for example, my son need to do science project, he can use you tube to collect the information he wants, in addition he can communicate with his team group by using we chat, furthermore, the parent can learn their kids by watching videos in different subject, also these tools help student to take online classes especially these day, we are facing pandemic disease and we cannot attained traditional classes, moreover, video games can be considered as entertainment tools help student to release their pressure from long day school and learn them how to communication with each other because they can play together online games with people who do not know them, in this way they can exchange the skills and experience . As we can see the importance of electric tools in education.
To sum up, the statement is not as persuasive as to it stands, this based on exposition that mentioned above, that smart phone and computer very useful in the process of education.
The education is essentiat thing in children life, therefor kids should obtain a good education, with the enormous development of technology like invention of smart phone and presence of internet and a lot of social media, some believe that, these devices will make the education more difficult than before in the past, in my perspective , I do not concur with the statement that, computers and electronic tools may negative effect on children learning, In the following essay, I will elaborate on a couple of reason to explain my point of view.
To begin with, computer and smart phone are paramount tools for everyone, especially student, this is due to the fact that, these devises enable kids to obtain enormous knowledge and information that cannot be obtain from teacher or parent, because in the school teachers have specific mission and limited subject, in the other hand students can get many information by using their computers or smart phone, even they spend long time on the phone or playing video game, they learn how to face any difficulty or hard mission and how to solve the situation. In conclusion, we can see the advantages of electric devices in our life.
In addition, computer and internet can be beneficial for children, they can help them to do their assignments and project, for example, my son need to do science project, he can use you tube to collect the information he wants, in addition he can communicate with his team group by using we chat, furthermore, the parent can learn their kids by watching videos in different subject, also these tools help student to take online classes especially these day, we are facing pandemic disease and we cannot attained traditional classes, moreover, video games can be considered as entertainment tools help student to release their pressure from long day school and learn them how to communication with each other because they can play together online games with people who do not know them, in this way they can exchange the skills and experience . As we can see the importance of electric tools in education.
To sum up, the statement is not as persuasive as to it stands, this based on exposition that mentioned above, that smart phone and computer very useful in the process of education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94240837696 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66311918172 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539267015707 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6003584229 29% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 63.0 20.1344086022 313% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 294.690468496 48.9658058833 602% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 314.666666667 100.406767564 313% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 63.6666666667 20.6045352989 309% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.0 5.45110844103 349% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267068389972 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135686039896 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.182710756912 0.0737576698707 248% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190432277785 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.203182755599 0.0645574589148 315% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.7 11.7677419355 286% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 15.99 58.1214874552 28% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.7 10.1575268817 263% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.26 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.23 8.01818996416 128% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 10.002688172 290% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 27.2 10.0537634409 271% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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