Essay topics: TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task
People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education is very important part of our lives. It is vital in every person because it can serve as a vehicle in having a good future ahead of us. Some people attend College education for a variety of reasons such as new experience, career preparation, increased knowledge. In my view, people attend University for career preparation for two important reasons.
First of all, I attended college because I can have a stable work after finishing my studies. Moreover, there will be a greater opportunity for me after graduation because having a college degree will give you an edge in landing a job. My own experience is a compelling example of this, when I was in Nursing School at Olivarez College my professors taught me a variety of knowledge, experiences in how to deal with patients and it prepared me to be a better nurse. Thus, it helped me to be equipped with the right tools needed to be a professional nurse. I believed that with the helped of my professor in Nursing school I become one of the best in my field and I could would not have done it without their guidance and support. In addition, during my first job interview in Makati Medical Center the panel of interviewee were impressed with the way I answer their questions and hired me on the spot, and they give a position in the intensive care unit and now I am the head nurse of the ICU.
Secondly, college education will provide you with financial freedom. Having a degree will lead you to heights where you could not imagine is possible. For instance, our supervisor in Makati Medical center offered me a teaching job in the hospital and I will be handling 2nd year nursing students. In addition, my salary will be doubled in this teaching job and will also broaden my knowledge in teaching styles and techniques. This opportunity gave me a more financial freedom and made my career in nursing more fulfilling because I can share my knowledge and expertise in the intensive care nursing.
To summarize, I strongly believed that people attended college for career preparation. This is because having a degree can help you find a decent job and give a more financial freedom in your finances.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72295514512 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72817860243 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488126649077 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7123730612 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.294117647 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2941176471 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180035485787 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811990266916 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10990908455 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154726380546 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945708252604 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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