friend has decided to switch careers but isn’t sure which to choose. What advice would you give them? Provide reasons and examples to support your response.
There is no shortage of opinion on whether it is better to switch the career which means takes a lot of risk from life. If I suggested to my friend about changing career to a new one, I would definitely urge her lot to make progress in her life. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following reasons.
First of all, Switching her career is very helpful to live with delight in her life because in today world a lot of people prefer to change their jobs to acquiring invaluable experiences and seeking for their favourite things for doing many different works in all over the world. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my experience. When I work at first time on the business project as conductor after the graduation of my university, I was easily bored with my job within a half-year so I determined to pursue in my dream job which is really low-paid environmental researcher in my local town. Despite those hardships, I wanted to apply the small research company as an assistant. After almost six months of hard-working, I promoted a legal employee in my company so now I am really happy with my decision because it gives me unfathomable pleasure even it has plenty of workloads. This example demonstrates how making a resolution to change my career which is my least favourite one is changed my life altogether.
Secondly, Trying a lot of things in your life as much as she can create an opportunity to make progress on my friend’s life also sticking one place in her entire life is utterly ridiculous because it means she can’t improve her abilities in different situations and even can’t disclosure her hidden talents. Drawing from my brother’s experience, He didn’t satisfied with his job because it is very low-paid even if he worked in stretched hours. One day, He applied in a foreign-invested company as an engineer then he was accepted readily to work in this company due to his great talents. He said that it was an entirely open-minded event from him because working with intelligent and hospitable people is grateful and it enables him to learn from his coworkers day by day. Without decisive determination to shift his career, he couldn’t be fulfilled with his life like now.
I strongly recommend to my friend that changing her career is the best decision to make as ever she has made. This is because it allows her to be happy with her life more fully and because it helps her to make improvement which leads her to a bright future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in the following reasons. First of all, Switching her career is very helpful to ...
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ng for their favourite things for doing many different works in all over the world. I have to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, i feel, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71205357143 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85928264599 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515625 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.3229158952 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.9375 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0943013431809 0.236089414692 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379148695477 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.031234467325 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0688814546925 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292947906931 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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