Change is a very crucial part of our society as it provides improvement in our life. In the past few decades, changes have occurred in the technology which contributed to a very safe and secure lifestyle. People are living longer today than the past because of changes have taken place in significant ways. Some argue that technology has been taken play a vital role in this step. Others hold the different opinion that education, as well as change, in our diet, have improved people's mentality towards a better lifestyle. From my perspective, technology is the best route through lifestyle has been improved in the past few years. I take the position on account for the following reasons.
Primarily, no one can deny the fact that the advancement of technology plays a pivotal role in human's long life. In the past, thousands of people died every day because of numerous diseases. Science and medicine have found various new medical technologies and surgical treatments that can cure deadly diseases. Also, in the past, people did not have the technology to diagnose rare and deadly diseases, and doctors also did not aware of their sign and symptoms. As a result, the patient died without getting any medical care and treatment. On the contrary, many preventive actions are taken care before the diseases occurred such as flu shots and vaccinations. Thus, all these improvements were not possible in earlier days, and that is the one reasons that people live longer at present days.
Moreover, the most prominent point to be mentioned is that self-awareness which has been developed among the people. People are taking various steps towards a healthy lifestyle. My parents are a compelling example of this. My mother always looks for the nutritional value before she buys any food packet. We have also switched to a healthy oil for preparing food at our home. on the other hand, the internet helps my parents in various ways. In every morning, they do exercise by watching some videos which guide them on how to do different exercise. Also, we have bought some gym instruments at home where they can do some exercise too, but I always prefer to go to the gym, since gym in our community has been improvised a lot in last few years. They have various modern technological instruments and with the help of that, I can precisely reduce my weight. Thus, all these health-related technological improvements were not possible in past days, and thereby, people live longer today than earlier.
Finally, there are other factors that leads to people's longer life such as some changes have taken place in their diet habit. Nowadays, as I mentioned before, people always check calorie table before they buy any food packets. Even, the organic vegetables and fruits are available in the market which has been proved very healthy for them. On the other side, the education system has been changed, Students are required to study the health and nutritional class in high school. Additionally, the government has prohibited a consumption of some health injurious food items such as cigarettes and tobacco. Thus, everyone is trying to build a healthy community which is the reason for longer life in the present time than past days.
All in all, I strongly believe that it is not possible to live longer without the help of technology. This is because it helps us to avoid such serious health problems, and it makes our working lives a lot easier than the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...thy oil for preparing food at our home. on the other hand, the internet helps my p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, look, moreover, so, thus, well, such as, as a result, as well as, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2870.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 584.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91438356164 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91590194646 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61706583597 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482876712329 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 910.8 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4232696421 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6875 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106436956907 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0299570948185 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382449853229 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0700466505411 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0143974628399 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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