In general, people are living longer now. Which of the following do you think accounts for this phenomenon?
Technological improvements
Changes to education systems
Improvements to our diets
Use specific details and examples in your answer.
Overall, it is definitely a fact that people are living longer and longer lives; in fact, the average American now lives to be 82 years old. However, what is the cause of this phenomenon? In my view, there is no doubt that this is caused by improvements in the quality and quantity of our food. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, food is now enriched with a lot of vitamins which are able to prevent many diseases and health issues. Most of the food on the shelves at the grocery store have been enriched with vitamins that contribute to overall health and longevity. For instance, a new type of rice was developed called Golden Rice. This particular rice is a strain that is fortified with Vitamin A, and that helps to prevent blindness in toddlers and children and contributes to healthy vision. In addition, when a parent purchases orange juice, it often has calcium added to it which helps bones grow stronger and denser. It also has Vitamin C, that helps to boost the immune system, prevent the flu, and shorten the duration of the common cold. In the past, food was not enhanced in any way and therefore this caused a lot of deficiencies of crucial vitamins and minerals. The fact that our food quality has improved by leaps and bounds has no doubt contributed to our longer lifespans.
What’s more, food handling and safety has prevented a variety of illnesses and diseases which were once very prevalent in society, because how disease spread was misunderstood. A long time ago, it was not understood that heat killed bacteria. It was the famous work of the microbiologist Louis Pasteur who introduced this idea to the public. Pasteur had done a study to try to figure out how bacteria spread so rapidly in milk, which was causing a lot of deaths at the time. Through his research, he demonstrated that subjecting wine, beer, and milk to high heat for a short time killed the bacteria that caused it to sour and become unsafe to drink. This process, now called Pasteurization, is used on every farm in the United States and the numbers of people who pass away due to drinking unsafe milk has dropped steeply. This example illustrates the fact that through scientific discovery, food is safer now and this is one significant reason that we live much longer lives.
In conclusion, although there are certainly other factors that may be considered, I believe that the quality of food has improved so much that we are now living much longer lives. In my view, this reason stands head and shoulders above any other consideration.
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- Some people believe that playing video or mobile games has no benefits at all for your children while others think it can be a good hobby Which one do you agree with and why Use details and examples to support your answer 85
- Some people believe that playing video or mobile games has no benefits at all for your children while others think it can be a good hobby Which one do you agree with and why Use details and examples to support your answer 70
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72087912088 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57926859679 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518681318681 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6751691332 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.285714286 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204589488932 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597831339418 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496052138728 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137536021305 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648973574681 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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