A gift (such as camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child’s development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why?
Frankly, it seems, among many different things that can contribute to a child’s development, very difficult to prefer one to another. From my point of view, each option has its unique advantages. But I would like to buy a pet especially a dog for my children because it has great effects on their development. In the following paragraphs, I will try to explain my position more clearly.
First of all, these days, most parents are really busy. They have to work from early in the morning to late at the night. So that, children spend most of their spare time alone in the house. According to the latest researches which were published in well-known journals, spending time alone has negative influences on children. In my opinion, having a dog can help them feel happy and relaxed. They can play with dog, watch television with it or even read books for them. Besides, children can feel safe and danger of robbery or other problems will reduce.
In the second place, children can learn necessary skills such as responsibility and so forth. For example, when I was seven years old, my father bought a dog for me. He taught me how to feed it, bathe it, etc. I always took care of my dog carefully so I learned how to become a responsible person in future.
Last but not least, a pet can encourage young children to exercise. For example, I got used to going to the park near our house and playing with my dog. In my point of view, it was a good entertainment for me during my childhood.
Taking all the aforementioned arguments into account, it can be concluded that purchasing a pet for children is a great idea. It will contribute to their developments based on the reasons which I outlined above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, frankly, if, really, second, so, well, for example, such as, first of all, in my opinion, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1405.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62171052632 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7045295666 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615131578947 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.550880611 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.25 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0923072441907 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0283474378594 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434513387856 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0545999199688 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387410117709 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.92 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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