The government can take a variety of actions to help protect the environment. Which one of the following do you think is the most important for the nation’s government to take to protect the environment?
1. Fund research to develop environmentally friendly energy sources such as solar and wind energy.
2. Preserve the natural places like forests and protect the animals that live there.
3. Enforce laws to prevent the pollution of air and water by large companies.
The answer to the question that how the governments to help protect the environment can be varied from person to person. In my opinion, enforcing laws to prevent the air and water pollution by larger companies is more beneficial. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, the most hazardous and harmful pollution is produced by large companies. In fact, if governments enact some strict laws, they are able to curb their contribution to air and water pollution. Therefore, If they take some solution to tackle this problem, the public affect the action of politicians by voting for those who propose a solution to tackle air and water pollution rather than those who ignore it. Because the governments have the power to ban their negative contribution to air and water. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better. There is a company, which produces chemical fertilizer, near to our city. A high percentage of water pollution of our city stem from this company. Subsequently, governments enact the laws which force them to refine the water before reaching the water. For this reason, I strongly believe that the most beneficial solution to prevent at least mitigate the negative effects of companies is enacting some strict law by governments.
Second, nowadays most companies are depending on the subside of governments in order to survive in the competitive world of the market. As a matter of fact, governments can threat them to eliminate theirs subsides if they continue to poullutin the air and water. In addition, Since most of this pollution deriving from using old equipment, the government is able to force them to allocate some of their profit to invest in buying advanced equipment. For example, when I was an undergraduate student, I had a part-time job at university campus magazine as a reporter. As I remember, one time, I interviewed professor Nejati, who is a well-known expert in the field of environment. He told me that after enacting some strict laws forcing the companies, which had a high contribution to air and water pollution, to buy new equipment, the pollution index has decreased enormously.
In conclusion, no one can deny the important role of governments' laws in order to eliminate or at least mitigate the air and water pollution, which produce by large companies. Not only do they reduce the air and water pollution enormously, but also they can provide an opportunity for companies to have better equipment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, well, at least, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a matter of fact, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04066985646 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9014838923 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502392344498 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8091314682 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.35 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174358082371 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537948227495 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422459706842 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118740603028 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167010818098 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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