In modern society, university has developed different features, including researcher, internship, and education. People have a lot of options, and it is a good situation that increases competition for students. However, I disagree with that university spend a lot of money on social activities can attract students.
To begin with, good students focus on education, and social activities can't improve education. To be more specific, knowledge can increase the competitive ability of the student. For example, my friend William, who was a Taipei university student, the education ranking of the university is very famous, which many companies like to hire an employee from this university. Taipei university has a high quality of education for the student, and it provides many learning resources such as E-learning, teaching assistant, high-level class, and so on. It will make ensure that each student can get good education experience. When William graduate from Taipei university, he got an excellent job in the Google company.
Secondly, good students care about the future, and the experience of an internship is important for students. In other words, if the university provides a particular internship than other universities, it will attract more students to apply and register the department. For instance, union university designs a unique program with an internship choice in Intel corporation, and it helps students to get more experience or competitiveness in the future because Intel is a famous company. As a result, union university has a lot of students to apply to this department.
Admittedly, some people might claim that social activity can relieve stress and increase students to choose the university. Nevertheless, students can not only participate in the social event but also asking parents to relieve stress or have physical education classes in their daily routine. Therefore, the university can maintain a good environment for good students.
In conclusion, if the university wants to attract more students, they need to emphasize the student's education and internship opportunity at university, which good students always care about. Thus, the factor of attracting students have a different aspect.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 72, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...cus on education, and social activities cant improve education. To be more specific,...
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Line 9, column 93, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...re students, they need to emphasize the students education and internship opportunity at...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1901.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55847953216 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07103441061 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523391812865 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5189792676 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.611111111 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.44444444444 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43994354851 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145448403174 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811383139777 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255012590579 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338557926406 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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