If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

I was born in São Paulo, Brazil. São Paulo is the biggest city in Brazil. Since always, me and every people which live in São Paulo complain about many issues like noise, traffic jam, life’s costs so expensive, and so on. The following essay will discuss in details about some issues and what things I would like to do to resolve some these problems.

First of all, If I could, I would like to change somethings in my hometown, like improving public transportation. When people need to go somewhere, they almost always use cars. One of the main causes that lead a traffic jam in São Paulo is a large number of cars in the streets. For people who live there is very tiring confront traffics jams daily, to go work or even back to home. For instance, I usually spent more than two hours to arrive in my work and the same to back home.

Secondly, São Paulo, it is almost it for sure a city which never sleeps. For example, I never could sleep well in my hometown because of loud noises, even in my house which it is located on a quiet street. If I could I would like to create some rules to control the noises in the city.

Thirdly, lives in São Paulo it is very expensive comparatively other cities in Brazil. Many taxes are charged every day for any products. Rent a house, or even buy foods, or go to restaurants are examples of these high costs. If I could do anything, I would give better remuneration conditions for people to improve someway their lives.

To put it in a nutshell, São Paulo is a good city to live, but some issues bringing itself a couple of drawbacks. These drawbacks could be resolved if something is done. I strongly believe that development in public transportation and the creation of rules against noises are the better way to increase the life’s quality of all people who live there.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...that lead a traffic jam in São Paulo is a large number of cars in the streets. For people who liv...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... which it is located on a quiet street. If I could I would like to create some rul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, for example, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53153153153 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49629219403 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537537537538 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0249225751 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.4210526316 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5263157895 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102857655989 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0303063945623 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395625471904 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0551476546472 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231636530044 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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