If you have an opportunity to send your child to study abroad, would you have him/her educated in the US or in your home country?
If I have an opportunity, I will have my child educated in the US. There are three reasons for this. First, my child can learn English better. Second, my child canexperience various languages and cultures. Third, my child can play sports. Since my child can be better educated in the US, I will send him/her to study in the US.
First of all, my child can learn English better in the US than in Korea. At school, my child will learn various subjects like Math, Science, Social Studies, Music, and Art in English. Doing so, he/she can talk and write about various topics in English. Then after school, my child will converse with others in English. This way, he/she will practice conversational English.
Second of all, my child can experience various languages and cultures in the US. Unlike Korea, one can experience many different cultures and languages at a very close distance. For example, if my child wants to learn Vietnamese and their culture, he/she can go to the Vietnamese community and mingle there. If he/she wants to try the Italian cuisine, he/she can visit Little Italy. Moreover, there are many different ethnic festivals and ceremonies that my child can visit locally in the US.
Thirdly, my child can play various sports in the US. Unlike most Korean schools, US schools have excellent sports facilities. For example, many schools have swimming pools, football fields, basketball gym, tennis courts, and many others. Moreover, these schools encourage students to play sports. However, most Korean schools do not have such fine sports facilities and they discourage students playing sports.
US education can benefit my child in many ways. My child can master English, broaden his horizons, and become more physically strong. Therefore, if I could have my child educated in the US, I will not hesitate to send him/her abroad.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Second, my child canexperience various languages and cultures.
Error: canexperience Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Different Words: 144 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 314 350
No. of Characters: 1469 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.21 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.678 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.405 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.716 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.403 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.575 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.273 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 115, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...he US. Unlike Korea, one can experience many different cultures and languages at a very close ...
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Line 6, column 404, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...visit Little Italy. Moreover, there are many different ethnic festivals and ceremonies that my...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'thirdly', 'for example', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.28021978022 0.229887763892 122% => OK
Verbs: 0.115384615385 0.158761421928 73% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0879120879121 0.0866891130778 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0494505494505 0.046263068375 107% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0631868131868 0.0685040099705 92% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0906593406593 0.118717715034 76% => OK
Participles: 0.010989010989 0.0351676179071 31% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.49297839393 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0164835164835 0.0309702414327 53% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.043956043956 0.0887237588012 50% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0549450549451 0.0209618222197 262% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.0139019557991 0% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1852.0 2387.08602151 78% => OK
No of words: 307.0 408.028673835 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.0325732899 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48200974243 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.387622149837 0.338922669872 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.28338762215 0.251872472559 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.182410423453 0.174417080927 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0944625407166 0.112833075102 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49297839393 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491856677524 0.524397521467 94% => OK
Word variations: 49.0284760774 59.2087087015 83% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 12.7916666667 20.5533526081 62% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.27366658 48.84282405 54% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.1666666667 120.699889404 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.7916666667 20.5533526081 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 41.1304288817 45.7405998639 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.67469879518 1.45489161554 115% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284831062706 0.300154397459 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.126335823873 0.103427244359 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.102903817012 0.0752933317313 137% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.544298720366 0.497263757937 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.13022283175 0.151897553556 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11231253196 0.114077575197 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124486341959 0.0781384742642 159% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.251967622867 0.336927656856 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.123986411515 0.067059652881 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181908349469 0.210909579961 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0989806748677 0.0618886996521 160% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.91756272401 203% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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