in modern life young people should have the ability to plan and organize
In the last three decades, life has become very technologically advanced. Some people believe that this improvement in technology could simplify young people's live, hence they do not need to plan for their future goals. However there is a substantial body of evidence claims that cutting-edged technology has made life more intricate, thus young adults should have the ability to organize their lives. From a personal perspective, the latter point of view carries more weight given that planning and organizing in advance have a positive impact on youngsters' financial and academic success. Below I will strive to explain my supporting points in more details.
The first and foremost point, Recently, education has become very difficult. To put in other words, there are many subjects students should learn about to keep themselves updated. Provided that students want to achieve success academically, they should plan and organize for their studying. A vivid example that could be given to shed light on what was stated above is, ten years ago when I was in high school, I had many subjects, such as biology, chemistery and math. Thus, I had to stick with a study plan not only to finish my work quickly, but also to have a chance to review my materials over and over, so I could recall them easier. Although the subjects were hard, I could succed with an excellence. Nevertheless, one of my friends did not plan for her study, so she cramed before exams and fely overwhelmed, so ahe failed. Consequently, having the ability to plan and organize is integral for success.
Next couple with academic success, productivity is another virtue of being organized. To put it in other words, youth usually possess sevral future goals, so having a plan for these goals could save young people's energy from being wasted or scattered, and they could trun them into into several achievable ones. For instance, Bell gates the famous entrepreneur said, that he set a plan for his goals when he was young. Hence, he could effectively put himself on the right trak and finally, he became one of the most important leaders in the IT field.Therefore, people who paln for their ultimated goals could be more finacially successful.
Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt, in this advanced life people should have the ability to plan and organize not only to crystallize objective, but also accomplish their goals. It is suggested that schools design learning activities to teach their students how to plan for their future goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2117.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05250596659 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7181706858 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572792362768 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4015499549 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.421052632 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326979033261 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100960414575 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107777656225 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219696847334 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831536053611 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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