Imagine that you have been given the opportunity to advise the government of a city or region (area) that you are familiar with to spend more money on ONE thing to benefit the city or region. Which ONE of these do you believe would be the most beneficial for the city or region? Why?
-Providing more affordable housing
-Decreasing (reducing) air and water pollution
-Attracting new businesses to the city or region
‘Cities make life better.’ This is the slogan of Shanghai. If given the opportunity that to advise the government of a city to spend money on one thing that benefit and beautify the city, some people probably suggest the government to spend financial expense on decreasing air and water pollution or attracting new business to the city or region. However, from my point of view, I would strongly advocate that the government should spend the funding on providing more affordable housing.
To begin with, providing more affordable houses could allow more high-tech professionals who live in poor village to go into the city and serve for the society and nation. The phenomenon that many talented people who were born in village in poverty cannot get access to the metropolitan because of the high price of the housing is more and more prevalent worldwide. Science and technology are the first productivity of the development. The sustainable development of the society relies on these experts a lot. However, the high price of housing is now acting like a barrier, impeding the fast pace of the growth of economy. Therefore, government should invest the capital on the housing a lot in order to attract these people to promote the progress of the society.
In addition, attracting new business to the city cannot be solved through government funding. Investors would choose the city to invest judging on the its prosperity and economy, whereas the availability of resource is the foundation for both two things. Business man would likely to established his company and do big deals in economic centers like cities near the ports, intensive in human labor or with abundant natural resource. As far as we know, resource and transportation act as important roles in dominating the whole business programs. Only financial investment by the local government would sometimes not be enough. As a result, attracting new business to the city cannot be easily solved by the government funding.
Finally, decreasing air and water pollution is important admittedly. However, for those cities which cannot meet the demands of the citizens for living a better life should not spend the money on dealing with environmental problem first. Improving people’s livelihood may be the premier task. It would never be too late after citizens could live a more comfortable life in city.
In conclusion, based on the reasons that decreasing air and water pollution and attracting new business to cities cannot ensure the increasing welfare of the city, I totally agree that government should invest money on providing more affordable household.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20187793427 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81585661375 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504694835681 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8807601735 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.8 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259463492867 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714629097397 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673487148883 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146887820123 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762505295632 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.