In the past few decades, the world has been growing at a fast pace. On that ground, the government of each city of the country is constantly making its efforts in order to achieve higher growth of the city. In this regard, some people contend that making efforts in reducing air and water pollution or building reasonable housing may help the government as a whole. On the other side, there is a group of people who think that attracting new business to the city will be helpful. Certainly, from my perspective, the latter view contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that inviting new business indirectly calls for the city’s overall prosperity. To be more specific, the establishment of a new business not only provide work for people whole live in the city but also invites high-tech professionals who live in the countryside but apparently, did not get the opportunity to work in the realm of the city. Gradually, the new business and proficient employees of it will work in integrity in order to make a profit to the city where they live in. To shed more light on it, the establishment of a reliance firm in the city of Jamnagar in 1991 could be the best example of what has been elaborated above. Actually, the Reliance firm had attracted more than a thousand people in the city of Jamnagar within a few years of its establishment. People from all over the country went there to work in the Reliance plant. Indeed, primarily it was the government who supported the building of this company. Shockingly, within a few years, the stock prices of Reliance firm touched sky-high as the company was doing so well in the country. Thus, attracting and allowing business firms like Reliance would definitely help the government to make a profit in the future.
Another noteworthy reason is that although new business may not profit the government in the short term, it surely makes an extravagant profit in the long term. To illustrate this more, a well-established company could make a good reputation at an international level with the help of the local government which will further attract new investors to invest their money by utilizing lucrative resources of the city. As I mentioned earlier, with the development of Reliance company, there were another ten more companies from different countries invested in the city within the next five years which enforced a strong bond between countries. Therefore, had the government of a small city like Jamnagar disliked the new business, the government would have never made a good relationship with other countries.
All in all, by contemplating all remarks, although some people may not agree with my viewpoint, I strongly believe that the government should give priority to building new business in the city. This is because it helps the government to make huge revenue, and welcoming other countries to start a business in the city would strengthen the relationship between the two countries.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, but, first, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2579.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 518.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97876447876 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8474039644 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471042471042 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 794.7 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2993514189 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.80952381 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.80952380952 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165667655981 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534416163333 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0319818596475 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107148474368 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205926907018 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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