Imagine that you own a company and that you are interviewing people who applied for a job at the company. Three candidates applied for the job. Which ONE of the three candidates below would you choose to work at your company? Why would the candidate be the best choice for your company?
-- The candidate with the most experience
-- The candidate with the most creative ideas
-- The candidate who is most motivated and enthusiastic about working for your company
When some people own a company, some will choose to hire interviewers with the most experience. Others may hire the most creative applicants. Still others prefer candidates who are the most motivated. For me, I would undoubtedly choose the candidate who is the most motivated and enthusiastic about their work. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, if I had a company, I would definitely wish that my employees are efficient in their work. Conspicuously, the candidate who is the most motivated and enthusiastic are usually extremely efficient. For example, my father owned an IT company, and he always hired software engineers who have the perseverance to do their task for more than 5 hours without standing up once. To be more specific, my father told me that one of his subordinates, Todd, was frantic and enthusiastic about front-end technology. For most of the time, Todd could complete the front-end of websites in less than 4 days without getting exhausted. On the other hand, my father secretly told me that one of his coworkers, Jane, was skillful in web-designing. She graduated from a prestigious college and won uncountable gold medals in competitive programming competitions. However, my father told me that this type of person was usually lazy and irresponsible. Indeed, even though Jane had enough skills to come up with a website in less than one week, she often procrastinated and could not finish her mission in time. In short, my father’s experience is one of the reasons why I prefer enthusiastic applicants over skillful, knowledgeable ones.
In addition, if I owned a business, I had to make sure that my company is profitable, and hiring motivated employees can help me ensure that my firm is always profitable. Take my friend’s corporation as an example. My cousin was the manager of a machine learning firm, and he told me that one of his workers, Jane, worked ten to twelve hours a day on average. More precisely, she could accomplish customer behavior analysis, data gathering, and model training without complaining about anything. In other words, her average productivity was the highest in the company; she made countless machine models that dropped 96% accurate advertisements to customers. Eventually, the company earned five thousand million dollars from advertisement thanks to her hard-working. On the contrary, my friend also mentioned an uncanny engineer in his company called Todd. Todd is a creative AI expert, and he often cleverly tweaked model parameters to increase performance rate. Nonetheless, thanks to his creativeness, he once trained a high-precision yet over-fitting model without consent. That is, it often produced undesirable advertisement results to customers. Eventually, the company lost millions of dollars due to the significant client loss.
In conclusion, if I were the boss of a firm, I would definitely choose to hire applicants that had abundant motivation and enthusiasm toward their work, considering the aforementioned examples and arguments. That is not to say, of course, that the other two candidates are incompetent. Nonetheless, I maintain that the third candidate is the best option for my organization.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, third, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in short, of course, in other words, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2686.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26666666667 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19431203443 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523529411765 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 846.0 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.4537874365 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6206896552 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5862068966 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.48275862069 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154739882785 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0442203813343 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485779400843 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115394232004 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040865850482 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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