Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
- An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
- An organization that gives people money to start their own small business
- An organization that provides medical care to people in need
In today’s life, a successful government that wants to have an ideal society should control the proportion of poverty. In order to do, need not only the government but also charitable organizations. An important factor for such a prosperous society is that it should not have people who live in the streets and do not have food to eat. In this regard, I prefer to donate money to an organization that provides food and housing to people in need. I feel this way for two reasons which I will illustrate as follows.
To begin with, providing food and a place to live for people who do not have them make our community a better place to live. As a matter of fact, while they are hungry and homeless, they tend to steal money and food, and worse is that they have to sleep in the street, all of which make the cities and towns unsafe. Furthermore, this situation affects on quality of other people's lives, and it will be a threat for people who live in the same city. For example, when I was a child, I lived in a part of a city where the poverty rate started to rise; as a result, the number of homeless people who slept in the street during the night was increased. My sister and I could not play outside at night anymore. Based on that, my father decided to leave the town where I was born. Consequently, donating money to organizations that help these people enable us to have a better place for living.
The second reason is that house and food are primary needs for every human to live. The idea of providing medical care or jobs to people who do not have food and shelter is not reasonable. Imagine they do not have a shelter, so where will they rest when they get back from work? If they have children, how can they go to work? I believe that the more people have a basic living standard, the better they are able to make a plan for their life and find a decent job. Therefore, they gradually can make their life better if we help them with their basic needs.
In conclusion, all ways and organizations that help other people in need are beneficial, but these should be organized and rated. I believe that donating to provide housing and food is important and gets on the first rank. Since, first place, the cities have become a better place to live by decreasing the homeless people rate, and in the second place, they have the chance to go forward to find a job after meeting basic needs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, as a result, to begin with, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1954.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.38116591928 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35672729999 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464125560538 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3193069921 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0476190476 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2380952381 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20079877355 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776739790148 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809711716312 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145665826906 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499925914907 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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