Numerous factories have been produced in a lot of places in modern day. It has both advantages and disadvantages. However, people are arguing about whether the factory effects in a positive way if it is established in a town. In my point of view, I strongly believe that establishing a factory in a town is going to account for some problems that can disturb our daily life. I have two reasons that support my opinion.
First, founding factories make people unable to open the window on a hot summer day. People usually open the window on summer day. However, if they open the window, the gases from the factory will come into their home, and it provides unfresh air. People cannot breathe in fresh air anymore. Even though they have an air conditioner, it has a huge cost, and people are unable to afford it. I have a compelling example of this. I had visited a new apartment with my parents to look around before. However, there was a factory near the house, and my mother did not like it because she anticipated that it would provide fresh air into this house when we opened the window. This example can be proof that establishing a factory is harmful for a town.
Second, the gases that are released from factories can affect the natural environment of a town such as the atmosphere. As you know, the emission of gas from many cars is enough to harm the atmosphere or environment in a town. But, if there is a factory, it becomes a more polluted environment of the town. Although there is a tree which is kind of an air purifier outside, it cannot endure the large amount of harmful gas from cars and factories. As an example, in China, the main and renowned problem is a large amount of dust, due to numerous factories and cars. It means factories as well as cars is the main culprit of air pollution. Let’s assume that there is a factory in my town. The air in my town will be the same as China’s.
Consequently, with establishing a factory, individuals will unable to open the window, and also the atmosphere of the town will be polluted. Therefore, I can claim obviously that establishing a factory is bad for people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, kind of, such as, you know, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56103896104 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6364160957 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477922077922 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0719348369 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.1666666667 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0416666667 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0881727816616 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0299119225989 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0304071946852 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0552048544364 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.01588331781 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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