Is it advisable for teenage children to take part-time jobs?
Stepping into adulthood marks the beginning of a brand new stage of one's life. It also denotes numerous encounters with challenges that may have never shown up during the golden years of childhood. In the face of such a reality, many responsible parents attempt to help their teenage children adapt to future challenges as early as possible. Some of these children are encouraged to take part-time jobs. From my point of view, it could be a suitable way to meet that need.
First of all, during the course of working part-time, teenagers will have the opportunity to learn more and accumulate experiences for their future careers. No matter what type of job they are engaged in, they could gain some practical knowledge and skills, which will prove useful and valuable if they are employed in a related field after graduating from college. There is enough evidence to testify to this. During a summer vacation in high school, my friend Kate took up a part-time job as a shop assistant in a clothes shop. Such an interesting experience taught her how to bargain with customers and how to communicate with people skillfully. Today, she has made herself a successful sales manager in a multinational clothing corporation. In a sense, the part-time job she once took benefited her considerably.
In addition, children may gradually understand the reality of making money, thus becoming more mature. One's attitude toward money reflects his values. During the process of working and receiving payment for it, they will naturally comprehend that not a penny is easily gained. Rome was not built in a day. Only through diligent work, perseverance, and a strong sense of responsibility can a person deserve pay. Indeed, comprehending this fact about work and pay symbolizes one's mental progress, which brings him closer to maturity.
Undeniably, there are other effective ways available for parents to prepare their children for their future. To illustrate, joining in various summer camps could be a good choice. Life experience in a camp helps train teenagers to live independently under tough conditions. They could take advantage of such a precious chance to master some basic life skills. In addition, it is also advisable for parents to take their children out on international or national tours. Traveling broadens their horizon and makes them more open-minded. All these qualities can be found in every successful adult.
To sum up, adulthood constitutes the longest and the most important period in a person's whole life. In order to make it more meaningful and successful, it is a wise decision on the part of parents to help their children make early preparations. Without doubt, encouraging teenagers to take part-time jobs will bring substantial benefits to these future adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, thus, in addition, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15418502203 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84457017824 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599118942731 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.782608568 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5714285714 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2142857143 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.42857142857 5.45110844103 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338491171786 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728349880171 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100123543854 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172184283977 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693580989947 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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