It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent’s job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parent’ job.
Since the dawn of the humanity, careers and professions play a crucial role in our life. In all over the human history people followed their ancestors’ careers. However, nowadays, there is an active controversy over whether it would be better for children to continue their parents’ jobs or to choose their own way and interest in their professional life. I personally, subscribe to the view that following their parents’ job, children will lose their chance to prosper. On the contrary, they must find their job according to both their interest and society’s current needs. The following paragraphs will elaborate more on this issue.
To start with, people need to be interested with their careers because it is a life time issue, and if we do not like our job it might be a very laborious task for us to continue it day by day for several years. Therefore, children should follow their own dreams not their fathers’, otherwise, they may fail in their life. For instance, consider a boy whose father is a merchant; however he dreamed to become a lawyer for his entire life. He, definitely, has no talent in trading, but he is able to perfectly argue on the social problems and human right for many hours. He will not be successful in merchandising, although his father can provide him with all the needed knowledge and equipment. However if he continue his higher education in law and become a lawyer, he will outstand in his career due to his interest and his enthusiasm.
On the other hand, nowadays, thanks to the advanced technological breakthrough, numerous new careers come to existence that there were not before. In today’s modern world a high level job need meticulous knowledge in mathematics, modern engineering and computer science. We cannot be prosperous in our job unless we refresh our knowledge and skills constantly. In such situation, our fathers are so far from the new world of technology and their jobs and their knowledge seem significantly out of date. To elucidate this idea, I would like to recount a personal story. My father worked in General Motors Company for 20 years. Last month, his boss informed him that he have to retire because they want to replace him someone who is professional in programming. He has no idea what means programming. As I noticed that event, I changed my mind. I had plan to continue my father’s career in General Motors. However, I fully try to complete my courses in programming and software design which can provide me whit more job opportunities in future.
Drawing upon the aforementioned reasons, it is better for children to not to follow their parents’ job. Because in order to be successful and achieve a rewarding job in future not only do we need to be interested personally in our careers, but also todays’ promising job positions are available only for individuals who are in a good level of modern sciences and highly technical skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 80, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...sted with their careers because it is a life time issue, and if we do not like our job it...
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Line 3, column 701, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...all the needed knowledge and equipment. However if he continue his higher education in ...
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Line 3, column 715, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'continues'.
Suggestion: continues
... knowledge and equipment. However if he continue his higher education in law and become ...
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Line 5, column 1043, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... provide me whit more job opportunities in future. Drawing upon the aforementioned reas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in general, on the contrary, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2468.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97580645161 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97758096296 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524193548387 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9796180416 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.72 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.84 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392230098954 0.236089414692 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111068890551 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135586572311 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276332917781 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122264408293 0.0645574589148 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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