In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specificreasons and details to develop your essay. | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific

reasons and details to develop your essay.

it goes without saying that since the dawn of humanity being able to live a prolificspan> and elongatedspan> life is of the most salient dreams of any individuals. this, however, has been not fulfilled until this recent century. The question which arise from this fact is that among all the changes that have happened to modern human, what has led us to this point to become able to live longer. Although it is hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I personally subscribe to the view that technological developments and improvement in work condition are the two main factorsspan> which have played a pivotal role in our life and allow us to overcome the death. span>

To start with, in this sophisticated and progressive world where we live, thanks to the advanced technological breakthrough we become able to successfully tackle with multifarious types of diseases which could easily bring us to the point of death in the past. As a case in point, an in-depth study conducted in some developing country demonstrated that in last 50 years a hefty of fatal diseases cured with the help of cutting-edge innovations in health field and invention of tremendous amount of medicines. These can enhance the improvement process. As an illustration consider the oppressive example of a soldier whose legs were injured during the First world Warspan>. In those days medicines had no choice but to cut down his legs and let him die in pain and infections. this, however, is not a fatal case in today’s medical world. Anti-bioethics are readily accessible to all the people around the word. span>

Another relative reason for which we became able to increase our life span is improvement of work condition. it is no secret to anyone that in the past our fathers worked in very tedious and unfair conditions. One of the most adverse point regarding the past work condition was lack of the retirement age. Engaging with laborious tasks and duties until the senescencespan> led old people to lose their health and power sooner than it should. As an illustration, I would like to recount a personal story. My father told me once that his grand father lost his life in the age of 40 at 1914. Nevertheless he asserted that it was a very natural event, on those days most of the people died before reaching to 60. His grandfather was a farm worker whose boss did not let him leave the farm before he worked 15 hours a day. that was a tedious malicious labor, his body did not tolerate such pressure, thus, he passed in youth. Had they had a good government which had some measures for work time, they would not have been killed by hard labor.span>

In conclusion, drawing upon the aforementioned reasons, I do believe that technological progression and work condition improvement contributed to a more prolonged life span in our today’s world. Not only have we access to more medical facilities than before, but also we our work time has been shortened.span>

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, thus, in conclusion, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3762.0 1977.66487455 190% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 6.97959183673 4.8611393121 144% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 10.8524192794 2.67179642975 406% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 285.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528756957328 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 1073.7 618.680645161 174% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.51630824373 132% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 147.954042731 48.9658058833 302% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 171.0 100.406767564 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.033979805086 0.236089414692 14% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.021393888555 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321727200635 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0236265891584 0.150856017488 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249340999352 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.7 11.7677419355 201% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 13.28 58.1214874552 23% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.4 10.1575268817 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 23.5 10.9000537634 216% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 24.0 10.247311828 234% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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