It is better to exercise with others than doing alone
Nowadays, with the development of society, earning more incomes, people have many free times compared to in the past; thus, they usually do exercise to recuperating their physical condition. Each person has a different style; some people like exercising alone but others doing together. Hence, there is a controversy about which is more positive effects between alone and together. Be a variety of exercise styles as there may, people need to do with others because it is more efficient and improve relationships.
First of all, people will vastly improve interpersonal skills through doing exercise together. This is because, by doing physical activities with others, people have interacted with others and, in this process, they will learn how to communicate and cooperate effectively as a team. Furthermore, these interplays help them to know each other; this makes their string firm. For instance, attending university, my timid sister took a basketball class to relieve her stress. By playing basketball with other students, she developed a sense of belonging and experience team spirit, and finally, she can get along with them. Had it not been for participating in the class, she would not have been able to develop herself into such a sociable and capable person.
Besides enlarging networks, the most important reason is that people can exercise more efficiently by checking each other. The main purpose of working out is to find the vitality of physical condition. The exercise plan of people who do alone usually sticks to nothing. On the other hand, with the development of technology, exercising with others, people usually use apps to check their daily exercise procedure. By referencing the checklist, people can give advice or get motivated by others who complete daily physical activity plans more than they do. Furthermore, teamwork can amplify the range of sports they can do. As for my story, for example, when in high school, after school, I tried to do exercise many times, but the plan went out the window. One day, my classmate suggested taking part in his working out teams to me, and I accepted. Partaking in the group, I could accomplish my plans easier and feel healthier by playing sports with them. But for joining the club, I would not have improved my health and make just useless plans.
In conclusion, exercising together is more beneficial than doing alone. This is because people could be more sociable. When doing together, people can have a lot of conversation with others. In addition, people can work out more efficiently. It prevents the plan of coming to nothing and helps people to do broad exercises.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, thus, as for, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2220.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11520737327 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70375775843 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534562211982 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5858696853 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.36 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356545396938 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10664280732 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0930606015186 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24334954255 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610366945742 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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