It is commonly believed that in life, success is not the most important thing: it is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fall. Do agree with that idea?
It is generally agreed today that staying happy and optimistic when we fail is more important than success. Let us consider what advantages and disadvantages of the optimism attitude are. And contrast them with pros and cons of the success. So we can see the big picture and understand the top choice of the claim.
The first thing that needs to be said is optimistic attitude in today world proclaimed the high priority attitude in life. There are numerous studies that explain one side of a coin. Optimism is better because it is decreasing the stress levels and increasing the quality of human life. The less stress a person has the healthier him or her become. From the other hand, it is vague opinion, people who are big optimists they usually don’t work too hard; they feel lucky to have what they have. They don’t raise their bars, and keep their limits to rule their life. I disagree with that position in life because every human being should pursue a better job, better status, and better goals, than just agree what he has and stop improvement in anything. If people would stop developing themselves, our species disappear from the earth long time ago. Only by developing our skills and minds we will thrive and be able to maintain our society in balance.
It is true that being an optimist is better than pessimist but only if it help people to recover from failure and push them farther. Successful people are those who would sacrifice their health if it needs. They are eager to achieve their goal no matter the cause. They usually work harder than everybody else; they always stay ahead and keep their speed. Successful people take their failures as experience and learn from their mistakes how to get a better result. Those who consider success the most important thing in the world are achieving more than others. And it is not about optimism it is about their attitude to work and about their character. I think success is the more important than optimism. When I was a student and I got a bad grade for my assignment I was angry on myself and worked harder and eventually I received the best grade in the class. I was not optimistic because it could stop me from putting more efforts and just agreeing to the evaluation. I wanted to be the best student and I was thanks to my attitude and character.
To draw the conclusion, one can say that optimism is better, but I hold different opinion. Success is the key to better life and people who pursue it get far than those who have optimistic sight on everything.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 75, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
...is better than pessimist but only if it help people to recover from failure and push...
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Line 7, column 151, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'gets'?
Suggestion: gets
...to better life and people who pursue it get far than those who have optimistic sigh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, i think, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67777777778 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42026526451 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493333333333 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.5602082267 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9615384615 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3076923077 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 5.45110844103 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199267957479 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597885268758 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0897834387545 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138316797364 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0782520483239 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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