Which way would you like to change to improve your health:
the kind of food you eat，or the amount of exercise，the mount of stress
If I had to choose only one way to improve my health I would definitely vote for a decreasing the stress level. Every human being has only one life and the most important thing in the whole world is our health. Some people don’t understand it until they face troubles with it. Some people care about it all the time, they eat healthy food, they exercise to keep fit, and they struggle with the stress. If it was possible to exert the stress from our life it would made it healthier and happier.
To begin with, today people conquer with the stress a lot more frequently than a few decades ago. Recently the human lifestyle has changed dramatically. The technological advancements keep growing everyday and people tend to apply those changes in a daily life. Eventually people have more possibilities but consequently they have more responsibilities and issues. The speed of life has shifted because of the amount of new opportunities. Now, people have more time for additional work, spare activities, like sport and creativity. Most of parents prefer their children in a variety of activities to develop new physical and mental abilities. That is why even children in their young age face the stress by participating in new activities. When I was twelve I usually spent my free time reading and drawing. We didn’t have so many options in the city like today. There was only one sport club and a choir for the old people. So, even if I was good at drawing my parents were not able to provide me a tutor or art classes because we did not have it in our small city. As you can see from the abovementioned today’s world is faster and people pursue to catch every momentum in order to use it beneficially. Because there are so many things to do, that in the end of the day, most people would like to get a fulfillment from their actions. That is why we always run to be on time everywhere we should be.
Secondly, the stress diminishes a productivity of a person at work or elsewhere. Usually it takes more time and energy to recover from the stress. It also distracts people from their daily routine and causes health problems. Personally I suffer from migraines and the reasons for that any emotional shifts, even a small quarrel can cause the pain. This is why I want to reduce the stress level in my life. There is a strong body of scientific evidence that stress causes particular diseases like heart disease. Such an emotional state, like stress provokes the rise of the blood pressure and the heart beat. In the result this leads to the depletion of the organism.
In conclusion, all broach reasons mentioned above strongly validate my opinion. The stress is an essential cause of detrimental effects on the human health. That cannot be simply altered as diet and exercises.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 470, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...exert the stress from our life it would made it healthier and happier. To begin w...
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Line 1, column 501, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...it would made it healthier and happier. To begin with, today people conquer with...
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Line 2, column 198, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...technological advancements keep growing everyday and people tend to apply those changes ...
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Line 2, column 533, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the parents') or simply say ''Most parents''.
Suggestion: Most of the parents; Most parents
... activities, like sport and creativity. Most of parents prefer their children in a variety of a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2309.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71224489796 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67584331431 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524489795918 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7725583881 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.4838709677 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8064516129 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.54838709677 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169273366 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383668111087 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391861491268 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0969335253195 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410968886022 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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