It goes without saying in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live in, human beings have been looking for ways to improve their information. Some individuals believe it is crucial to know about every events happening around the world, even if it would not affect our lifestyle. However, some others have an opposite point of view. In my vantage point, we should be aware of every events happening around the world. In what follows, I will elaborate on my vantage point.
First of all, it is significant to be mentioned that, being informed about any events happening help persons to broaden their perspective, even if events are irrelevant to individuals' daily life. To be more specific, people can not use any information in their life since maybe their circumstances are different. But, being aware of events happening provides more flexible attitude and perspective toward situations which people encountered with during their lives. For instance, I watched a program about benevolent celebrities helping poor societies such as african countries. They have fascinating events happening in poor countries with the aim of collecting more money in order to providing more amenities for children. This event would not affect my daily life, because it was impossible for me to travel to poor countries and help them, besides I was not wealthy enough to spend my money on charities. But, this program change my perspective toward poor guys and their lifestyle, and requires me to know about them more. If I had not watched that program about events happening, I would not be able to broaden my view.
Another reason which deserves some attention here is that, knowing about events around the world is important since maybe they do not have effect in our life but can be useful for other members in society. Put it in other words, we are only a segment of society, and should not be used to draw conclusion about all members in society, even maybe they affect our family members daily life. Thus, by being aware of events happening around the world we can tell about these events to our family members and our friends. And sharing this events' information lead to a beneficial change in their life.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that, getting involved with world news is crucial since it would not only develop our perspective but also help us share these information with others in order to be useful for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, thus, for instance, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9421686747 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57224824323 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477108433735 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7273443244 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.944444444 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0555555556 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325396118222 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113665241262 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911537028362 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19512828403 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109175725799 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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