TOEFL T P O 46 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading asserts that using electronic medical report is more effective and more beneficial rather than paper forms. The lecture however finds the idea dubious and casts doubt on the reasons proposed by reading passage.
First,the author argues that using electronic records reduce the cost and also can easily access. Conversely the lecture brings up the idea that, this way does not have significant impact on cost reduction since doctors keep their papers with their signature for their backup information, so this way is not efficient.
Furthermore the reading passage holds the view that using electronic records would remove human errors and reduce the chance of errors.On the contrary , the professor underline the fact that it would not eliminate possibilities of errors since they still use papers and take note by hand, and maybe at a late night they enter poor and wrong patient information into electronic forms.
Finally, it is stated in the reading passage that in this way researchers have easily access to these information and lead to development in research.In contrast, the speaker dismisses this issue due to the fact that the researchers would not access to patient information easily due to privacy laws. The researchers should obtain many permissions especially patients' permission, and they have to follow many rules so they can not access to these information easily.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...sons proposed by reading passage. First,the author argues that using electronic rec...
^^^^
Line 2, column 98, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Conversely,
...ce the cost and also can easily access. Conversely the lecture brings up the idea that, th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...rmation, so this way is not efficient. Furthermore the reading passage holds the view that...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 135, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: On
... errors and reduce the chance of errors.On the contrary , the professor underline ...
^^
Line 3, column 150, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...uce the chance of errors.On the contrary , the professor underline the fact that i...
^^
Line 4, column 97, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...s way researchers have easily access to these information and lead to development in research.In ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...ion and lead to development in research.In contrast, the speaker dismisses this is...
^^
Line 4, column 441, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...ow many rules so they can not access to these information easily.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, in contrast, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1178.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 222.0 270.72406181 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30630630631 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63423049543 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567567567568 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 363.6 419.366225166 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0662251656 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.31986126 49.2860985944 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 168.285714286 110.228320801 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7142857143 21.698381199 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.8571428571 7.06452816374 210% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 13.3589403974 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.0289183223 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.11 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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