In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Throughout the history, money plays a prominent role in every person's live, And human beings have been looking for ways to manage their money. Some people believes it is an appropriate idea to teach children at early age to manage and control their own money in order to become a financially responsible adults, while some individuals believe it is unnecessary to start teaching children to be a financially responsible person at early age. In my vantage point, parents should teach their children at young age. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
First, It is significant to be mentioned that, in order to have responsible adults, society should start teaching young children in any aspects of life such as financially responsibility. Young people are more vulnerable, they learn more easily and instructions retain in their mind in order to use them in the future as an adult. at this regard, if we teach children to manage their money, they learn how to control and be responsible for money and financial issues. Thus, they can become a financially responsible person in the future.
Another reason which deserves some attention here is that, if children learn to control their money and avoid spending money in dishonesty manner, they would continue this behavior as an adult.Parents should give their children a sense of responsibility for their own money, and pave a way for young to allocate their money for their necessities and do not waste their money. This approach results in being financially responsible in the future. For instance, when
I was at primary school, my father gave me 5 dollar every week and I should spend it entire the week, and only with good management I could afford every thing that I need. As an adult, I allocate amount of money for one week and avoid spending extra money.
From what has been discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that, people should be taught to manage their money at young age. Because children not only learn easier,but also continue their manner until adulthood.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, thus, while, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97391304348 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71427879717 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492753623188 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.0638095792 48.9658058833 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.571428571 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6428571429 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430586050285 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155496824916 0.076458572812 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943617563576 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254443765626 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973897928382 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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