TPO15.In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Managing of money is crucial desired skill that everybody should have. In current world only fifty percent of the population knows how to manage their money sustainably without compromising the future need. It is believed that to become financially responsible adults, children should learn how to manage their own money at young age. I agree with that belief because of the following reasons which I will eradicate in the following passage.
The first reason that strike my mind after reading that statement is that when the children becomes an adult and if they don't poses or learn that skill of managing their money then they face a lot of difficulties in life ahead. For example in childhood my elder brother used to get a lot money without any constraint. Whenever he asked for the money or for some gift he used to get it. His childhood was gone very smooth and never learned to manage his money. When he grows old and became independent, he still like to live as he used live in his childhood and never cares for they money. This habit his makes him to buy unnecessary things and he used to waste a lot of money, which finally led him into the huge debt of money. Due to this habit of his he has faced many other problems in his life. After facing so many problems in his life he slowly learns to manage his money his own. If he had learned that earlier in his childhood then he might not have to face these problems that he faced in his adulthood.
In addition to that learning to manage money makes you to feel confident and also makes you independent in life. when you learn to manage your money in early childhood then it gives you a feeling of confidence and make you to feel independent. For example after seeing my brother problem that he faced in his life my parents decided to give me fixed amount of pocket-money every month. In that money I have manage all of my expenses. From that money I have to buy all of my clothes, shoes and other necessary things. And also from the same money I have to manage my travel expenses and all of my little expenses too. In the start I used to face lot of problems, but slowly learn the skill of how to manage your own expenses sustainably. Now today I do not face any such problems that my brother faced in his adulthood.
In conclusion after considering the both reason it is concluded that children should learn to manage their own money from their childhood as it protects them from future problems and makes them confident and independent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, so, still, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52967032967 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3967131218 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424175824176 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9542399162 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6818181818 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6818181818 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95454545455 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241779736785 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928275546382 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115111924533 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198558673059 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0992536786424 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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