Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Being financially responsible is undeniably a crucial manner in human life as nowadays all goods and requirements for life are becoming expensive. Thus, if we do not have such responsibility, we will not be able to manage the costs of our lives. A controversial argument that is often raised regarding this topic is whether children should learn to manage their own money at a young age to then become a financially responsible adult or not. If I were obliged to choose, I would think that it is necessary for kids to learn it for several reasons, on a few of which I will elaborate subsequently.
The first reason corroborating my view is that the children would learn every month there will be a finite amount of money that they can spend. Therefore, they learn that they have to manage the money they have and in the end leads them to become financially a responsible person as they practiced it when they were adolescents. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was young, my parents give me monthly money. As I knew that they will not give me money if I was run out of it, I tried to be wise where I am spending my cash. I learned at that age to be responsible for these issues. In comparison, my cousin was given as much money as she needed. As a consequence, even now that we are older and work for ourselves and earn money she can not manage the costs of her life.
The second rationale why I advocate this point of view lies in the fact that many adult's attitudes stem from a young age. This is due to the foundation of habits we learn to have when we are children. For example, last week I was watching a documentary about the problems or behavior that adults suffer from. The research had shown that most of the behaviors we have are the result of the habits we had as a kid. Therefore, if children learn to control their costs, they will learn it by heart when they grew older.
To sum it up, managing money at young age will definitely affect their financial responsibility when they become adults. This is because not only do they practice to be a responsible person but it also becomes a wonderful habit as a child which they never forget.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 368, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...hown that most of the behaviors we have are the result of the habits we had as a ki...
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Line 7, column 155, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'practice being'.
Suggestion: practice being
...dults. This is because not only do they practice to be a responsible person but it also become...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43640897756 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66279520299 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491271820449 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8241957477 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6315789474 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1052631579 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15789473684 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247111857608 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868645297562 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862635889953 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173626816638 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597254822544 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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