Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One should never judge a person by external appearances. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
People's appearance plays a prominent role in their life. Appearance is what we notice through what they wear and that would be a reason why we judge them through our first glance. While many people believe that we have the right to judge a person by his external look, I subscribe to the opposite view. I substantiate my belief by providing two supportive reasons that are elucidated below.
The fist reason corroborating my view is that people are not always in a good mood to care about what to wear. Thus, in such a situation, it would be out of respect to judge them by what they choose to wear. My own experience can shed light on this issue. When I was in the second grade of high school, we had a new student whom her parents recently got divorced and she moved to our city with her mother. She was so depressed as she could not see her father. Besides, she has lost all her friends and she had no one in our school to be friend with. At first, when I saw her I thought who is she in this messy cloth she looked like she smokes a cigarette which I repel. Our teacher told her that she has to sit beside me. I was upset that I had to spend all of my school time with her. After a while, she started to convey all the information that I mentioned before and I understood that the smell of the cigarette was for her mother. I was ashamed of my early judgment. I tried to help her to recover by introducing her to a psychologist that I knew. when a couple of months passes by, she was one of the most stylish girls in our school.
The second imperative reason is that not all people have the same test of fashion. They may wear a specific kind of cloth that is not widespread or it may relate to a particular religion. My own experience is a compelling example of this issue. four years ago, when I accepted at Amirkabir University which is placed at the capital of our country, I saw a girl who wore a bright red robe and a strange hat. I could not stop staring at her and the first thought that came to my mind was she was looking for some attention. But I could not be wrong more! the cloth she was wearing was because she was Kurd and it was their tradition to wear like that. Thus, again I was wrong to judge people by their external appearance.
In summary, I strongly believe It is necessary to first get to know people then make a judgment. They not only may have difficulties which block their minds to think about anything else but also their appearance could be different from others as they follow a specific religion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, look, may, second, so, then, thus, while, as for, as to, in summary, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 95.0 43.0788530466 221% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.26652892562 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39814985007 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477272727273 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2970841381 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.4230769231 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6153846154 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11538461538 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0723357580996 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0238194805552 0.076458572812 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283337638211 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0535418499065 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291827805287 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.49 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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