Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In high schools and colleges, it is more desirable for a group project to be evaluated the same regardless of the individual students’ performances.
school plays a prominent role in all societies. As it is where a country grew its new generation to rule on. so, schools are directly affecting the future of the country. Many people believe that students should have several short vacations throughout the year. However, I subscribe to the opposite view. I substantiate my belief by providing two important reasons that are elucidated below.
The first reason corroborating my view is that students need a long vacation to recover and prepare themselves to start a new term of study with full power. my own experience is a compelling example of this view. When I was in the second grade of high school, the government had decided to make some changes to the vacation time to examine how the result would be. Instead of long summer vacation, we had three short vacations every three months of study. As a consequence, we could not register for the gym or any sport like swimming as these activities duration was longer than two months. Thus, I couldn't recover myself or enjoy my free time to become ready for a new term.
The second imperative reason is that reducing the vacation can mislead students that life is all about education and conceal the opportunity for them to see there are important kinds of stuff that we students have to pay attention to. For example, about a month ago, I've seen a documentary about the education system in Korea which was really fascinating for me. it showed that the government makes sure that during the summer vacation all student attend some specific journeys which the school arrange for them to understand it is important to be sure that our forests and park should be always clear. also, some programs take the students to a retirement home so children learn how to behave with old people. If there was not this long summer vacation, there would not be the possibility for schools to arrange this wonderful trips to teach students these magnificent points and experiences.
In sum, though some may oppose the idea that long vacation is necessary, I have to confess not only will it help students to recover and prepare for new subjects to learn but also gives the opportunity to government or even students themselves to arrange some good trips to learn what are other important behavior they have to learn.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80856423174 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58205442561 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539042821159 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.4686855945 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.055555556 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0555555556 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05555555556 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133594493168 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04023729354 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318102391798 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0779066245975 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394578139168 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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