If you could meet a famous entertainer or athlete, who would that be, and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
I would choose to meet Allen, the host of Allen's show. She has a good personality and gives the feeling that if I ever have a chance to meet her it won't be difficult to talk to her. While many people believe that her show is not such a success and she is a bit obstinate I subscribe to the opposite view. I substantiate my belief by providing two strong supportive reasons that are elucidated below.
The first imperative reason is that her show is a comedy one. As all we know comedians, especially stand-up comedians, need to be friendly to attract people to come to their show. If they were not friendly they won't become so popular. Besides, it goes without saying that make others laugh and enjoy their time is not a job that someone with a stubborn personality could do. It needs good social skills and it is mutually exclusive to be selfish or stubborn at the same time. My friend's experience can shed light on this issue. She works at the supermarket in New York City when she suddenly found that Allen is standing in front of her and want to pay for the juice she took. Allen was smiling at the sight of my friend with her mouth open and shock face and tried to break the ice. After her joke, my friend started to laugh and everything become pretty normal. She always said that being in front of Allen doesn't feel like you are standing in front of a celebrity. In fact, it is quite opposite, she behaves as if you are an old friend. That's what encourages me to choose her above all other celebrities.
The second reason corroborating my view is that she is a good-natured person. She tries her best to help charities and finds a way to donate money and persuade others to do the same. I believe that people nowadays because of their chaotic life won't pay much attention to the poor who need our help. Also, due to the same reason, they need more laughter in their lives and watching comedy shows are good chose to cheer up. The Allen show has more than 100 thousand viewers around the world. Thus, it is a good idea that she encourages other people to help if they can.
In sum, though some may oppose the idea, I am really eager to meet Allen. She not only is kind and warm-blooded but also persuades others to help charities and donate. I believe if all the famous entertainers were like Allen, most of the charities would become richer to help.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, thus, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.399543379 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35654155241 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536529680365 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.1371627109 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.08 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.52 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100624573371 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.03001302053 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326669085729 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0704654414625 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267063875729 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.94 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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