TPO27 (independent)
If people have the opportunity of take a secured job they should take it right away, rather than waiting for a job that is more satisfying.
Jobs plays a very crucial role in one's life, the rapid growth in technology has created lots of job opportunities in the market and one can choose between the jobs. People demands for jobs can be classified in two categories first one is secure jobs means when ever you gets a opportunity should grab it and be happy with it and the other one is to wait for the job until you did not get the satisfying job. In my opinion one should be happy with job he get the first as a secured job and then try to push it boundary limits and move ahead, because of the following reason which I will eradicate further in the passage.
First reason that came to my mind is that, life is full of uncertainty and is unpredictable, no one know what will be going to happen in near future and what would be the circumstances in future, so it is better to get a secure job. For example there was a friend of mine who wants to become an IAS officer. In the way to his journey he gets a lot of job opportunities with a high pay but he rejects all the offer that he got, and keeps on preparing for its exams. He fails in first trail, he gave that exam again but got same result as in last year, he tried for five-year but failed every time. Now by that time he has completely lost his confidence and he did not know what to further in life because now it will be tough get a job now with high basic pay. If he would chosen up job earlier he would have been more happy today.
In addition to that getting a secured job will be more helpful for bearing someone own expenses and can offer a financial support to his family. One someone gets a secured job then he does not have to depend on other for its financial expenses. For example during my campus placement in my college first get a secured job. after doing that job for 2-3 year I stared preparing for my masters or post graduation. In this way I did not put any financial burden on my family and beard all my expenses by myself. So getting a secured job at first helped in to move on further in my life without any constraint.
In conclusion after considering all the facts and examples that are stated above it can be interpreted that getting a secured job is the best option for one person and after getting a secured job one can move further in life slowly slowly towards his goal in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
Jobs plays a very crucial role in ones life, the rapid growth in technology ha...
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Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[4]
Message: The pronoun 'you' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'get'
Suggestion: get
... one is secure jobs means when ever you gets a opportunity should grab it and be hap...
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Line 1, column 276, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...is secure jobs means when ever you gets a opportunity should grab it and be happy...
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Line 1, column 455, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...opinion one should be happy with job he get the first as a secured job and then try...
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Line 5, column 186, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ure and what would be the circumstances in future, so it is better to get a secure job. F...
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Line 5, column 761, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ough get a job now with high basic pay. If he would chosen up job earlier he would...
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Line 5, column 773, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have chosen' or 'choose'?
Suggestion: have chosen; choose
...ob now with high basic pay. If he would chosen up job earlier he would have been more ...
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Line 5, column 780, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to up'
Suggestion: to up
...with high basic pay. If he would chosen up job earlier he would have been more hap...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...would have been more happy today. In addition to that getting a secured jo...
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Line 9, column 326, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: After
... in my college first get a secured job. after doing that job for 2-3 year I stared pr...
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Line 13, column 226, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: slowly
...ecured job one can move further in life slowly slowly towards his goal in life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.21826280624 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32244547991 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463251670379 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.2122124265 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.375 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0625 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231496366677 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998435891251 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612102444032 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163176372638 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579488625527 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.49 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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