Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of learning to manage their own money to children. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely believe that children should learn to manage their own money at young age. It is my firm belief that it is important to children to know how complex is dealing with money for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.

To begin with, children can know about the worth of the money. This it is something important because they would appreciate the things what they already have and this it is crucial for taking care what they get and being grateful with their parents and close people. Besides, children could obtain the knowledge about the difficulty of deal with money and make effort to get succeed with it own money and will be able to achieve the financial independence when they become adults. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, my mother always teach me saving the tips which I receive in order to can afford the objects which I would have never bought if I will not save. As a result, I pay a large amount of money in things what give me a great improvement in the quality life of mine and my family. For this reason, I support the importance of teaching the value of the money in kids.

Secondly, young people need to recognize the real dimension of working to meet the goals which they propose in their life. Although they do not need to work, that is not a motive for disregarding of all the efforts who their parents or closing people do to give them food, studies or even leisure. Drawing from my own experience, I remember when I was a child my mother must work a lot to give us our lunch and pays my school and the same with my sister. Moreover, I have not forgotten the big stress when my mother needed to pay the expenditures of my family. Our difficulties for managing money it is in my memory until today, as a consequence I apply that lesson every moment when I could and fortunately, I know the importance of working. It is clearly to see why knowing the effort who someone else has put to make everything it have it will be significant to appreciate what we have.

In light of the above mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that children must learn how to deal with money. This is because kids must learn the heavy responsibility on money and its critical relationship with working.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50989010989 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50860034989 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492307692308 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.0635683155 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2777777778 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236692984452 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842592305381 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760505032342 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164065638069 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737051255525 0.0645574589148 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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