It goes without saying that in this sophisticated and progressive world where we live, all societies have been looking for ways to control society members' behavior and attitude in order to have a under control and stable society. Some individuals believe some of the rules that societies expect young people to follow are too strict. However, some of others have an opposite point of view. In my vantage point, these rules are not only not strict, but also necessary for youngsters in every society.In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
First of all, it is significant to be mentioned that, controlling young people by strict laws leads to have prosperous and responsible adults in society. To be more specific, young people encounter with many choices during they lives, and since they do not mature enough to know which approach is better for being a successful person in the future, it is societies' responsible to help them by strict rules. For instance, when I was a high school student, my father, as a small society, had strict and serious rules for me and my brother in studying our lessons. Some of which were we were not allowed to have dinner or playing with our peers as long as we studied our lesson and finished them. These rules were really strict for teenagers, but these rules required us to study hard and care about our education as a prior in our lives. If my father had not had these strict rules, we would not be a prosperous persons in society.
Another reason which deserves some attention here is that, teenagers are full of energy, so the society should control them by strict rules with the aim of preventing bad consequences. Put it in other world, youngsters may do foolish things due to their high energy. But, strict rules would frighten them. By these rules, the society can establish peace and order. For example, strict rules for driving with driving license for young people is seems strict but it is necessary and reduce the accidents and control teenagers' temptation to drive without driving license.
From what has been discussed above we can safely reach the conclusion that, the strict rules of society is necessary for young people to obey in order to have a successful and stable society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... behavior and attitude in order to have a under control and stable society. Some ...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...table society. Some individuals believe some of the rules that societies expect young peopl...
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Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the others') or simply say ''some others''.
Suggestion: some of the others; some others
...ople to follow are too strict. However, some of others have an opposite point of view. In my v...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...cessary for youngsters in every society.In what follows, I will elaborate on my pe...
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'live'
Suggestion: live
...encounter with many choices during they lives, and since they do not mature enough to...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'person'?
Suggestion: person
...ict rules, we would not be a prosperous persons in society. Another reason which deser...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, really, so, for example, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8165374677 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49799577802 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516795865633 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8771148628 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.5 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1875 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195901879513 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07467852332 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692665108758 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134683862542 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181687020432 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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