Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In the modern Era, government decisions play a prominent role in every society. Thus, allocating government's budget should be in wise manner and in order to provide public facilities. some people believe governments should spend money to internet improvements, while some others think it is crucial for governments to improve public transportation. In my vantage point, governments should pay attention to internet developments. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
First it is significant to be mentioned that, with advent of technology many tasks have been made easier. In this regard, governments should spend more money on this issue, as a result, both the government and people enjoy the merits of it. Improving internet access pave a way for society to do errand in an effective and speedy manner. It may be true that, an appropriate transportation may accelerate the speed of doing works, but it is confined to a little segment of society, and should not be used to draw conclusion about all society. In contrast, nowadays every individuals use internet and track everything on internet. The result of an experiment conducted in my country underscore the fact that, 80 percent of peoples do not use public transportation so they do not need contemporary facilities and allocating budget to this issue would be waste of money.
Another reason which deserves some attention is that, with an appropriate and fast internet access, we can have online communication with other countries or get fresh and important news, which can help our society to broaden their perspective and be aware of daily news from all over the world. On the other hand, internet can provides an educational environment. For instance, I usually use internet to learn English by watching Youtube videos, and consolidate my listening skill by online podcasts.
To sum up, from what has been discussed above , we can safely reach the conclusion that, spend money to improve internet access is more beneficial. Hence, governments should pay more attention to this issue since they not only fortify people's knowledge but also hasten the tasks in an effective way.
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Message: Consider replacing "in an effective way" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...les knowledge but also hasten the tasks in an effective way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, thus, while, for instance, in contrast, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18338108883 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95241167419 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558739255014 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.740563027 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0625 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262457004 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862193774361 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650572720963 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161410287053 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326399811711 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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