In this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, media has an immense impact on human beings' life. Many people believe media, especially television, may negatively affect youngsters' behavior. However some others have an opposite point of view. In my vantage point, Television and movies have more negative effects on young people. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
First, it is significant to be mentioned that, movies and advertisements are bad indicator of royal lifestyle affecting youngsters behavior negatively. To be more specific, Televisions are saturated with advertisements and movies advertising luxury lifestyle with the aim of selling their products. Since, the main users of television are composed of teenagers and youngsters, they motivated to have a luxury lifestyle and buying unnecessary stuffs. and this issue has negative effects on the way young people behave. For instance, my young sister is fascinated by a series which shows a wealthy girl with many posh dresses and the most contemporary sell phone and car. My sister consider the girl as a role model and imitate her attitude and behavior. My sister wastes all of her money to buy many unnecessary dresses that the girl uses. This manner, negatively affect my sisters' behavior. She just pay attention to expensive subjects and makes effort to buy them.
Another reason which deserves some attention here is that, Television and movies comprise violence scenes. And because young people are at vulnerable age, they learn aggressive manner. To put it in other words, youngsters have been influenced negatively, by watching movies. As a result, they behave aggressively and may be in some cases it has bad consequences. Results of an experiment conducted in my country, underscore the fact that, youngsters who watch movies more, they get angry and have aggressive manner more. As a result, the rate of crime among young population increases.
From what has been discusses above, we may safely reach the conclusion that, movies and television have more negative effects than positive, because it would negatively affect youngsters' perspective toward lifestyle. Besides, due to violent scenes it may change young peoples' manner negatively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, may, so, for instance, as a result, in other words, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38352272727 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88891122137 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568181818182 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0662847664 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1363636364 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23014592654 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703315720265 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878506053319 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151216094282 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301502468201 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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