In this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, human beings have been looking for best ways leading to more comfortable life. Governments play a prominent role in providing better life facilities for society members by allocating the budget to improving the quality of facilities. Many individuals believe governments should spend money to develop public transportation instead of improving internet access. However, some others have an opposite point of view. In my vantage point, it is more beneficial that governments devote money to enhance internet access. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
First, it is significant to be mentioned that, allotting money to improve internet access would help people broaden their perspective and knowledge, which results in having prosperous and developed community. To put it in other words, with the advent of internet, getting information have been made easier. In this regard, having appropriate and fast access to internet will accelerate this process. And people have more and up to date information about every events happening all around the world. By knowing about any event happening and knowledge in every field, society members will broaden their perspective and knowledge which leads to having more successful country. It is crystal clear that, providing internet access is only possible if the government spend money for it.
Another reason which deserves some attention here is that, improving internet access is more crucial than improving public transportation, since all members of the society use internet. In contrast, only a segment of society, use public transportation, and they use their individual cars. Thus, allocating money to public transportation would be wasting money. Results of an experiment conducted in my country underscore the fact that, the main users of public transportation are composed of old persons that, they are a segment of society, and should not be used to draw conclusion about all society, while in every part of society such as schools, banks, and many other important organs use internet as their cardinal factor in every day life and they perform their tasks with internet.
From what has been discussed above we may safely reach the conclusion that, internet access deserves more budget than public transportation. Since, internet not only enhance peoples' knowledge, but also help to improve the development of the country. In addition, spending money on intenet access is more beneficial due to it's number of users.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'in everyday'?
Suggestion: in everyday
...s use internet as their cardinal factor in every day life and they perform their tasks with ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...we may safely reach the conclusion that, internet access deserves more budget tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, thus, while, in addition, in contrast, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41309823678 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86519915824 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513853904282 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.5467122432 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.105263158 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8947368421 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0941493570876 0.236089414692 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0345364142343 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0260483177371 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0640431438046 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116034168808 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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