Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern world, individuals spend a quite bit of time on watching television or movies, reading newspapers, and listening to the radio. movies and television are a doubled-edged sword and have positive influences as well as negative ones on people’">people’s behavior. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among psychologists about the effects of social media on young people. Some psychologists believe that negative effects of the mass media significantly outweigh its positive effects. others, however, advocate the idea that television programs are very useful for juveniles. I personally, concur with the former. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the mist important reasons.
To begin with, broadcasts are replete with violence to be attractive for juveniles. they represent ferocious and fierce characters and young people repeat the behavior of characters and make trouble for themselves. In other words, these movies increase young people’">people’s inclination to inappropriate and aggressive behaviors. As a consequence, these broadcasts lead to juvenile delinquency and the increase in crime rate in the society. The more savagery is shown in the mass media, the more delinquent people is created in specific community.
Secondly, quite a bit of negative and unpleasant events occurs every day all around the world. young people who desire make the most of their leisure time and have fun with their friends or family are faced with negative news represented all the time in the mass media. they become sad and depressed by seeing war-torn people, severe catastrophes and their victims, and famine to name but a few. this annoying news convert their sweet time to the bitter one and impose lots of emotional pressure on them. In other words, it has negative effect on their emotions and feelings, when they cannot do anything to make the situation better. Therefore, daily news represented in television affect juveniles negatively.
Last but not least, besides negative effects of mass media on young people behavior, it can put their health in danger. If juvenile get used to movies and television, they may suffer from diseases such as obesity, blood pressure, and hearth problems to name but a handful.
All in all, nowadays, I really believe that the visual media affect young people adversely on the ground that they do not have appropriate content. they promote savagery in society or announce negative news which have destructive effects on young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, such as, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2164.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46464646465 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.39166891347 2.67179642975 127% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55303030303 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.2567525419 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3636363636 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86363636364 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263445868588 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712833506904 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479966637772 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150768938146 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377425963761 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.