Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In civilized and modernized societies, the behavior of youth has always been among primary concerns of human beings’ lives. Today, it is axiomatic that young people spend the longer part of their life watching TV. A plethora of people possess the conviction that watching TV and movies has more negative effects compared to its merits, whereas others might hold exactly the opposite view. I firmly endorse the first conviction instead of the latter. In what follows, I am going to aptly delve into the most outstanding reasons to advocate my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that youth should more concentrate on their lessons in order to enhance their aptitude in their favorable field. It should be stressed that when they highly watch movies and television, they will have likely less time for focusing on their courses and abilities. In addition, it is possible that youth can be lazy individuals because of watching movies extremely. For example, I have the friend who was the top student among her classmates. After a while, she got married with one of her classmates. The important point here is that they did not buy the television due to pay much more attention their studies. Accordingly, they obtained the fund for PhD position and went to the most famous university known Stanford University in America. Consequently, they would not have gone this university had they spent more time on watching movies and television.
Another noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that from psychological point of view, it is better that youth do more exercise and communicate with their fiend and family instead of watching movies. In fact, it can give rise to an increase of satisfaction and quality of life. By and large, it is established beyond doubt that those who do exercise and go to sport gym are happier than those who stay home for watching television in their spare time. Meanwhile, most of characters in movies are smoking, which can negatively affect the behavior of young people and increase their tendency to smoke. Moreover, the noteworthy statistics revealed by a social research in my country, show that the rate of depression among dormant and inactive youth is more than people who do physical activities. Therefore, watching movies can intensify depression rate among youth and endanger their health.
To put it in briefly, all the enumerated reasons lead us to the conclusion that watching movies can not only can cause youth to spend less time doing and focusing their works, but they can also pursue role models that have bad manners. However, a paramount issue that must be mentioned is that some counterexamples might exist, which are not mentioned above. As a result, conducting more surveys and studies is suggested to answer this question more precisely.
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Suggestion: most of the characters; most characters
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, briefly, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, in addition, in brief, in fact, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2364.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06209850107 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67528187245 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528907922912 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3144346776 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.454545455 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2272727273 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16910474369 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475049945393 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372548169311 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103912874445 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0192686330617 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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