Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In civilized and industrialized societies, job has been always among primary concerns of human beings’ lives. Today it is axiomatic that, people usually elapse the longer part of their life working. A plethora of people possess the conviction that having a secure job is better than waiting for a job with more satisfaction, whereas others might hold exactly the opposite view. Whether one agrees or disagrees with it depends on the lens through which one is looking. I firmly am approval with the former conviction instead of the later one. In what follows, I am going to aptly delve into the most outstanding reasons to advocate my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that, financial problems are reduced by having a safe vocation. It is undeniable that whoever has a secure job will have less financial problems than those who have not this situation. It should be stressed that, owning enough money is the one of the key factors in life. Therefore, the chances of these people can intensify to land a comfortable life in near future. The more time elapses, the more people realize that having a secure vocation is very significant in the modern era. In my own experience, the father of one of my friends was a pilot, and he earns a lot of money through this job. Consequently, he made a very comfortable life for himself and his family. His family would not have had the happy and comfortable life had he not obtained the secure job.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that having a safe vocation decreases the stress that will result from the work losses in the future. Today, people are worried about finding a secure and stable job. Therefore, those who have a stable vocation are not dealt with numerous problems about the job losses in the not too this and future. A recent study conducted by scientists of university of Virginia on people’s work revealed that 80 percent of those who have a safe vocation are mentally healthier than those who do not have this situation.
To put in briefly, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that having a secure job not only can cause to acquire enough money, but can also reduce the stress of work loss. However, a paramount issue that must be mentioned is that this cannot be used as a prescription for everybody and some counterexamples might exist. As a result, I suggest conducting more surveys and studies to answer this question more precisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 121, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'acquiring'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: acquiring
... having a secure job not only can cause to acquire enough money, but can also reduce the s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, whereas, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83764705882 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71251973667 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510588235294 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8757541797 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9047619048 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2380952381 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283022441958 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807808271354 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554321631943 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170380139646 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302370652362 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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