Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is clear that job or career is a pivotal factor in happiness and success. There is considerable anxiety among people about their job security and they may concern about whether they have opportunity to have triumph in job aspect of their life. Although some people might believe that nowadays due to the recent advancements of technology achieving success in vocation is easier than the past, I argue that because of rapid population growth and increasing number of sophisticated people in society, it is much harder to succeed in comparison to the past. In the following paragraphs, I will try to vindicate my standpoint.
First, Rapid population growth has intensified competition for a successful career. The more population the world has, the harder competition people face for pursuing a career. It is clear that when there are more population to compete with each other, the chance of finding a brilliant career with high salary and promising future is less. For instance, recently, I saw a job advertisement that was very suitable for me. I took measure as quickly as possible in order to acquire that job, but I understood that just after the job advertisement was released, employer hired the number of people he needed.
Second, increasing the number of educated people leads to an increase in rate of unemployment or job dissatisfaction. Annually, the number of people graduated from the university all over the world is exponentially rising. They have spent several years in the university and their expectation of career has grown significantly. These educated People are not willing to do low-level jobs even if these jobs guarantee successful future while people were doing any work with great effort in the past, thus their success was guaranteed. Because of limited number of high-level jobs in any society, some of these sophisticated people have great difficulty in finding a brilliant career. Noteworthy statistics reveal that lack of enthusiasm for some jobs that were popular among youth before causes increasing rate of unemployment.
To sum up, competition between great number of people around the world has made it really difficult to find a good job. Besides, expectation of a good career have increased and well-educated people choose their job with obsession. All of these reasons shows that finding a job with successful future is harder than what were in the past.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, thus, well, while, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16368286445 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91639958553 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493606138107 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4281085734 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.166666667 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7222222222 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181965804382 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660990411309 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477778293272 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125796218192 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148100079663 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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