Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In civilized and industrialized societies, human beings have always strived to improve their living standards and be more independent in their day-to-day lives. Today, it is axiomatic that young people like to make decisions by their own. A plethora of people possess the conviction that today's youth are less dependent on their parents than on the past, and they make decisions without the parents' interference, whereas others might hold exactly the opposite view. I firmly endorse the first conviction instead of the later one. In what follows, I am going to delve aptly into the outstanding reasons to advocate my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that nowadays youth want to broaden and promote their horizons in order to find pragmatic approaches and viable solutions to surmount their problems without the intervention of their parents. In fact, it can give rise to an increase in their satisfaction and esteem. It is also important to bear in mind that if young people are under supervision of their parent, they will feel bad about themselves and will not be satisfied with themselves. Therefore, they try to live without any interference of their families. By and large, it is established beyond doubt that every success stems from being independence. A recent empirical study conducted on successful employees of the most famous company in my country shows that 90 percent of them were independent in their work and not under the supervision of their parents during their youth. Therefore, these results support the conspicuous bond between the one's independence and the success of future.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that today parents are educated and knowledgeable and are well aware of the impact of independence on their children's future. Accordingly, these sophisticated people try to raise their children so that they can make their own decisions. It should be stressed that it can intensify their chance to become a successful and perfect person in near future. One of the startling facts which flabbergasted me is that some parents erroneously think that youth are not mature enough to make decisions about their life. In my own experience, I can live apart from my family and make significant choices about my life with my own thoughts. Because, my parent has raised me as an autonomous individual and they know about a pivotal role of independence in my future opportunities. I would not have been the prosperous person had my parent not raised me independently.
To put it in briefly, all the enumerated reasons lead us to the conclusion that nowadays not only youth tend to be independence of their families, but also the modern parents attempt whose children have an independent personality. However, a paramount issue that must be mentioned is that this cannot be used for everybody and some counterexamples might exist, which are not mentioned above. As a result, I suggest conducting a surveys and studies to answer to this question more precisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...a of people possess the conviction that todays youth are less dependent on their paren...
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Line 1, column 392, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...st, and they make decisions without the parents interference, whereas others might hold...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, briefly, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, whereas, apart from, in brief, in fact, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2548.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12676056338 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91936109697 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521126760563 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 794.7 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0605414352 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.818181818 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5909090909 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298827389092 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917606874894 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102768952399 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18655357025 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0897311098558 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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