The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people
In the modern Era, celebrities and famous individual's opinion plays a prominent role in society's lifestyle and they are crucial in their decisions making and belief. the most contentious issue around the world is, whether young people impress more or old people. Some individuals believe these issues are more important to old people, while some others have an opposite idea. I personally believe young people care more than old people. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
First of all, It is significant to be mentioned that nowadays young people are more deal with media and technology, so they follow celebrities' news and imitate their habits and their attitude. So famous person's opinion are more important to young people and they use to opt celebrities approaches about issues. The result of a research conducted in my country indicates that,media and virtual world affect people aged between 15-25 the most due to their sensitive age and they seek for a model to shape their character.
Another reasons which deserves some attention here is that, celebrities and famous persons act and think like teenagers and young people since their 80 percent of their fans are young. For instance, many celebrities wear contemporary dresses which is acceptable in young society or they have specific ideas about issues in society or they have special solutions to young people's predicaments in order to establish same interests with young people. By this way, they affect young peoples more and more and their opinion will be more important to these range of age.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that the opinion of famous celebrities are more important to young people and can influence them more because of their susceptible age. as a matter of fact, there are some other reasons and examples that can be envoked to support my perspective, but let suffice to this.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, while, for instance, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08517350158 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58867359482 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539432176656 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8660239903 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281363475303 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126340805157 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931593064128 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196704649887 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216647783596 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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