Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there are copious celebrities that have great-range exemplary influence through their behaviors and words on people. In my opinion, famous people's thinking are more significant to the youngster for two specific reasons, which I will explore in the following assay.
First ad foremost, taking life experience into account, as older people have lived for more years than younger ones, they naturally have witnessed abundant events and often own maturer minds. As the elder are adamant, even stiff, they can hardly be affected by celebrities' ideas, while youngster boast more flexibility and are more likely to put opinions on mind. For instance, my cousin is fascinated with an actor and follows most of his performance. He is too young to differentiate the good from bad, and some terrible tendencies emerge as the actor is expressing some overt and negative opinions. Fortunately, his mother identify his circumstance soon and direct him to the right track. Besides, the public notices that as well and writes some passages to point out the actor's mistakes as the warning.
What's more, considering that the bulk of celebrities are the same as younger people, they feel easier to harvest junior fans. Naturally, famous people enjoy a greater possibility to call for youngster to do something whether it's meaningful or not. My personal experience is a compelling illustration. I am a fan of a honored writer and he is concerned with national as well as international news. By reading the author's blogs weekly, I acquire up-to-date events without extra effort. Recently, I get to know there is an earthquake occur in the eastern region of our country and the writer is calling for us to donate for the suffering people. Instead of just advocating his fans, the author send many stuff and money to support with his greatest effort.
In conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that the younger people lay more emphasis on the opinions of famous people. This is because they are possibly more willing to embrace those ideas, and because the celebrities can become the examples to follow.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09142857143 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7458317204 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605714285714 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2684294871 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.823529412 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5882352941 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243827568304 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661038325077 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659189062226 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158040774564 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045484082701 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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