Many people dream of owning their own business but are afraid of the risks, instead ofstarting a new business, however, one can buy a franchise. A franchise is a licenseissued by a large, usually well-known, company to a small business owner. Under thelic

The reading asserts that, human beings have been looking for a secure and beneficial way for running a new business. One of the advantageous ways to start business is buying a franchise. The owner and the buyer reach an agreement in order to sell the products under certain rules and share percent of sales with each other. The lecture, however, finds the idea dubious and casts doubt on the reasons proposed by the reading passage.
First the author argues that, the buyer have access to reliable suppliers of the goods and services because of the head company. Conversely, the lecture brings up the idea that, the franchising companies may force the buyers to buy specific foods and services,which are overprice. And the buyers can provide these services and materials much cheaper individually.
Furthermore, the reading passage holds the view that, by franchising people can save money on advertising since the franchise owner already paid the expensive advertising. On the other hand, the professor underlines the fact that, the parent company receive 6 percentage of the sales, which is quite a lot of money. Besides, the franchise owner advertise their own products and brands. Thus it would not only not beneficial, but also more expensive rather than direct advertising.
Finally, it is stated in the reading that, franchising pave a way for having a secure vocation. In contrast, the speaker offers another choice that people wanting start new business can buy the whole independent business from the owners instead of franchising. It would be more beneficial and secure.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 259, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...uyers to buy specific foods and services,which are overprice. And the buyers can provi...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 270, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'overpriced'.
Suggestion: overpriced
...y specific foods and services,which are overprice. And the buyers can provide these servi...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 386, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...dvertise their own products and brands. Thus it would not only not beneficial, but a...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, thus, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 43.0788530466 28% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 257.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1673151751 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71734102106 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610894941634 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8628701867 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8571428571 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221138695518 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709488758686 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772800300057 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124981114221 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477419056169 0.0645574589148 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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