It is important to know the events happening around the world, even though it is unlikely that they affect your daily life. Do you agree or disagree?
The world has become a small village where any event happens any part of the world could affects other areas of the world. I agree that one should know about the events that happens around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect daily life.
To begin with, the world became interconnected net of common interests, whether economically or politically. Any problem that could seem that it is far from you and probably not affect your life on the short run, may suddenly has impact on your life. Therefore, it is better to keep abreast with the latest developments in world around you. For instance, the civil war which is going on in Syria, is far from Europe, however, it has a great impact on the life of people, not only in the Middle East, but also in Europe. The refugee crisis started affecting the EU countries when the refugees started to engulf EU. Moreover, the terrorism that came as a result of this war started to cross the boundaries of many countries. Based on what I have mentioned above, we can conclude that what seems far from you and not will intersect with your daily life could be in direct relation to your life and society.
Secondly, It is vital to follow what happens in other areas of the world to know about different cultures and circumstances where other people live. You could give help or support other societies that may need your support, such as in case of disasters or floods. This kind of empathy between different cultures and people help to build safer and stable world. Furthermore, it increase the chances to bridge the gaps between different cultures and religions, which enhances the opportunities of peace and mutual benefit. For instance, I have read about a village in some poor African country which needed funding to build school for the children in this village, but they couldn't find the funding to establish this project. A group of students in Finland, heard about this issue and they started collecting fund for this project, they launched a very successful campaign that managed to collect the money that is needed for this school. It was very happy news for those African children who finally will be able to have a lovely school in which they will receive their education to make their country and the world better in the near future, or at least, that we all hope to achieve.
To sum up, it is really important to follow and know what is happening around you in the world, even if it seems that it is not related to your daily life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 90, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...ent happens any part of the world could affects other areas of the world. I agree that ...
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Line 4, column 379, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increases'?
Suggestion: increases
...safer and stable world. Furthermore, it increase the chances to bridge the gaps between ...
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Line 4, column 674, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... the children in this village, but they couldnt find the funding to establish this proj...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, at least, for instance, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64719101124 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36587061559 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485393258427 0.524837075471 92% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1693030921 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.647058824 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1764705882 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6470588235 5.45110844103 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340132030731 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115959560092 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145586393806 0.0737576698707 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281827968938 0.150856017488 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149311700235 0.0645574589148 231% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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