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Controversy exists over whether today more time should be allocated to do things people should do rather than doing things they like to do. I believe, however, spending time on personal enjoyment is highly beneficial due to bolstering people's morale and motivating them to do obligatory tasks.
The first aspect to point out is that doing favorable things can boost people's self-esteem. Being engaged in personal enjoyment helps people take a break from their problems and unwind by doing things they are into them. People need this refreshment since the rigors of modern life are overwhelming, and people need to have fun to be able to persevere. Take the case of an employee who keeps leaving the work a few hours earlier than expected to go to a gym twice a week. Even though he could stay at work for more hours to do things he is assigned, he cannot deprive himself from of having such enjoyment. Not only does prohibiting himself from doing enjoyable things make him progress in work, but also it may lead to a bad performance due to personal conflicts.
A further more subtle point is that spending time on personal matters inspires people to succeed in doing things they have to accomplish. That is to say, people need incentives to work hard, and they can easily get this sense of being motivated through having some time for their own. For instance, a despondent employee might be fed up with his uneventful career. Consequently, he cannot perform well, and this negatively affects other people's efforts. Permitting him to spare time and enjoy himself make him feel better. Coming back to work, he has a strong tendency to work better since he wants to collect money to be able to enjoy more. In addition, this motivation enables him to meet the manager's expectations.
To summarize, people today should be eligible to spend more time on personal enjoyment since it helps them feel satisfied with themselves and motivates them to do things they should do more appropriately. It is highly time we stopped overlooking the drastic influence of high morale and motivation on people's success.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, so, well, for instance, in addition, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90756302521 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63610586499 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532212885154 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.853541672 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.058823529 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0127120858308 0.236089414692 5% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00477988106992 0.076458572812 6% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0133905547205 0.0737576698707 18% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00985103986276 0.150856017488 7% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0103818738353 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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