Museums are places, which will never lose their popularity. Many people find visiting them during their vacations enjoyable and beneficial. There are, of course, plenty of reasons why people want to visit museums. In this essay, I am going to explain two of them.
One important reason why people visit them is that museums provide people with the elegant atmosphere to learn the history of those places effectively. Many cities include museums showing some historic event with visual effects. Take my İstanbul trip as an example. In my first travel to İstanbul, I visit many historical places and building such as Hagia Sophia, Blue Mosque or Topkapı Palace etc. One of them was Panorama 360, which demonstrates the conquest of the İstanbul by the Ottoman Empire by touching the visual sense of visitors. When I entered the special room inside the building, what I saw was that I was inside a giant half sphere, where the environment of the battlefield was depicted on its wall. I could see the emperor riding a horse, soldiers holding their swords, cannonballs hitting the walls of the city. That war was the milestone in the world history because of its effects in the war technology and, I felt like I was in the middle of it. I think, by visiting that museum, I gained great knowledge rather than reading many books or watching documentaries.
Moreover, museums can also help people to learn the development level of civilizations. Some museums demonstrate important inventions and developments of either short or long period of specific time. For instance, during my Edirne trip, one of my destinations was Şifahane, which is called the Health Center Museum in English. There were a lot of different rooms demonstrating the healing of specific disease. Wax sculptures were used to animate them. I also learned that my country was able to cure mental patients with musical therapy whereas European Countries were torturing and killing them since their spirits were believed to be captured by evil. So, I clearly understood what my country’s development level was in comparison with others.
To my way of thinking, since museums provide visitors with great opportunities to learn more knowledge about the history of many places and important developments, people visit them.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, whereas, for instance, i think, of course, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13333333333 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7696180242 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578666666667 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.2698635321 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6666666667 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260208016599 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808370719763 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831826094847 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178039607165 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592088559885 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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