I utterly agree with the concept that, the world is changing into a single big community. The superior reasons why I believe this way are the expansion of the social networks, increasing similarities in lifestyles and at the end the constant and burgeoning amount of migration.
First I think that, the social networks has become an indispensable part of the peoples' lives and has strong effect on them. The very nature of the human kind has the tendency to imitate from others and under the shade of the social networks we are not only able to adopt ourselves to the latest fashion in our own country but also, we know about the people on the other side of the planet. For example, hollywood celebrities are now famous all around the world and eyes of the millions of fans are following their customs, behaviors and even their hobbies on their social networks. Nowadays, the similarity between the faces and styles on the shared pictures on the social networks like Instagram are vivid to everyone.
Furthermore, I advocate this ground due to the fact that, the extension of the technology and the wider accessibility has made the lives of the humans easier and more similar to each other. The increased trades, correlations and the reduction of the transportation time between the countries had made people to have access and consume variety of goods. For instance, people all around the world now are familiar with rolls roys cars from Moscow in Russia to Cape-town in Africa. Or even the chocolate brands like Kit-Kat and Nuttela are known by everyone from everywhere.
At last, the technology accommodates people with the conditions to travel more and easier. Not so long ago, there were a time that people even had barely left their home town. In contrary nowadays not only they go on a trip more, but also they choose to live in another country and migrate there. They get to find new friends and make them their own family. This way the cultures of different countries are continuously transmiting from one city to another.
In conclusion, the more technology develops and more people around the world are having access to it, the more boundaries and obstacles between the cities, countries and cultures are breaking. The social network, availableness of the resources and the escalating number of the migrants are significantly influencing the peoples' lives and making their cultures to become more adjacent to each other.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94146341463 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65196771815 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526829268293 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0721035983 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.176470588 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1176470588 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0634132621234 0.236089414692 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0223578449978 0.076458572812 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036333420263 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0445312268767 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377633445817 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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