Most advertisements make products seems much better than they are Do you agree or disagree

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Most advertisements make products seems much better than they are. Do you agree or disagree?

It is undoubtedly true that advertising serves as a communication channel to everyone across the globe. I critically assert that most ads make their product more attractive. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in my body paragraphs.

First and foremost, products that always thrive in the market are the ones with powerful ads. To be more specific, they induce people's potential to the extent that one will be persuaded to get the goods even if it actually has no benefits. For instance, in the United States, the most famous drink is coke. The reason being that the multinational company has really worn the heart of people as a result of their potent ads shown on television, billboards, cars and many more. Although the drink does not have any health benefits but could sell more than its competitors. Drawing from my own experience, my four-year-old histrionics is quite alarming whenever she sees anyone with the bottle. She is always hysteric at that moment such that she can finish up four bottles if not controlled. Her quirks for the product is a result of the colours she sees whenever the ads are being shown on television. Again, I found out that she does mimic what made the advert. If the ads hadn’t been shown, my little girl wouldn’t have known about the product. This example simply demonstrates how coke had inveigled my little girl.

Furthermore, publicized products do come with a lot of profits. In other words, the turnout is always high because you don’t have to do a lot of talks before customers purchase it. For example, in Nigeria where malaria is one of the diseases affecting about half of the population. A renowned drug known as lonart is the one attracting people because of the awareness the company has made. Even for the fact that it is not as efficacious as the relative competitor, but because of the way it hit the ground. Therefore the company has made a plethora of profits such that a lot of manufacturing plants outside Nigeria. If the company hadn’t spent on greetings ads, obviously they wouldn’t have made such enormous profit.

In light of the reasons mentioned, I believe that advertisements make commodities more appealing. This is because it helps them to thrive in the markets and because it reinforces more profits to the company.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86111111111 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74090657822 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55303030303 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.3852732563 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.6956521739 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2173913043 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.39130434783 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121129225686 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346053165077 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430552277261 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0766848651505 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226986140292 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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